AA010 半成品求砖 - ChaseDream

“This past winter, 200 students from laceName w:st="on">WaymarshlaceName> laceType w:st="on">StatelaceType> College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters. Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.”

GRATUITOUS ASSUMPTION that the students did not present because they did not care. The absence in pretest against proposed cut, however, doesn’t necessarily mean that these students are not concerned about the issue. They may have good reasons not to participate, and they may have various ways to demonstrate their objection to the funding cut. For instance, perhaps most students chose to write letters to opposite the plan, or perhaps they were actually planning an even greater protest immediately after the winter break.

UNFAIR ASSUMPTION that the 200 students are not representative of all W students. No evidence however, is provided to support the assertion. If these 200 students were selected carefully across the spectrum of W college students, they would be highly representative. Or if the 200 students account for large proportion of those who will be affected by the funding cut, the legislature would have to carefully consider the students’ attitude.

INSSUFICIENT SAMPLE: the statistic of W college students is quoted to support the conclusion that the students in the state as a whole do not care about the funding cut. But the information is vague because the sample is too small to represent all students in the state. Only one sample was investigated, thus making the hasty generalization unreliable. Unless more evidence can be provided to demonstrate that the W students represent all students as a whole, or unless the author presents more data about students’ activism in other college, the results of the survey is worthless to support the author’s conclusion.

还有就是请教一下，是说the author fails to do 还是failed to do？？

个人觉得fails to do 就可以了，后面那个句子你可以给一个整句出来吗？

我觉得你的这篇argument的提纲写的很不错呀。这篇AA挺难的，之前也有好多人问。但是你的逻辑很清楚找到了很多逻辑错误归类也很到位。你的语言也没有象你说的那样不好啊，其实是很不错呀！我觉得AA你已经可以了。或者你把整个文拿上来再让大家看一下？

1写提纲的时候不用展开的这么详细很浪费时间的。不如列的简洁一点呵呵我觉得JOE11GG的英文提纲就十分言简意赅，可以参考一下。

原来小女公子的上面写的是提纲啊？还以为是正文呢？写得不错，加油。

以下是引用judydongxueni在2005-5-27 15:36:00的发言：

个人觉得fails to do 就可以了，后面那个句子你可以给一个整句出来吗？

建议：

1写提纲的时候不用展开的这么详细很浪费时间的。不如列的简洁一点呵呵我觉得JOE11GG的英文提纲就十分言简意赅，可以参考一下。

2定期把自己觉得难的写一下

3匀出时间给ISSUE

failed to provide sufficient evidence to demonstrate that...,the author reaches an unfounded conclusion..

以下是引用oookk在2005-5-27 17:48:00的发言：

原来小女公子的上面写的是提纲啊？还以为是正文呢？写得不错，加油。

上面的MM，哪里有JOE11GG言简意赅的英文提纲？

偶的意思是JOE11GG在参与新题讨论的时候英文提纲写的很言简意赅，但是似乎没有所有的提纲，所以参考方法好了。