半小时内凑出来的，字数太少……
The author of this argument claims that since Olympic Foods will soon celebrate its twenty-fifth birthday, it can be expected that the company's long experience will enable it minimize costs and thus maximize profits. To support this argument the author cites a recent example from the color filming processing industry. The argument is unconvincing for several reasons.
To begin with, the author suggests that the reduction of cost in the color film processing industry can directly applies to the processing of food. However, the author didn't give any evidence on the similarity of the two industries. Indeed, the processing of color film and that of food are essentially different in many aspects. Therefore, it's not appropriate to make the analogy without comparing the two industries in detail.
Secondly, the argument's claim that long experience will enable a company to learn how to do things better thus lower the cost is not well supported. While it might be true that sometimes a company might learn something through the operation, it does not necessarily mean that it would definitely learn the specific thing, such as reducing the cost of processing. Here the author should provide more evidence about how the company's cost reducing could actually benefit from its experience.
In conclusion, the argument is not well reasoned. The line of reasoning of the argument is poorly supported. To further strengthen the argument, the author should clearly show the comparability of the two industries and provide detailed evidence about the relationship between long experience and cost reduction.
还有希望不？
句式挺多样化的，很有希望。就是举例少了点。
你在开头部分用用魔板吧，会长一些的。
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