写作不可怕，有恒心，高分拿~ 求狠批！！！

lyslj001

Mint静默 发表于 2013-8-20 15:50
Hi~我是互改tpo13综合写作的小伙伴，你的作业捏？

我写完了哦

不好意思超时啦！ 我来也~~

Mint静默

sorry~我来晚了

lyslj001

sallygreen 发表于 2013-8-20 15:21
请lyslj大牛姐姐修改~ 啦啦啦 踏着轻快的脚步留下一篇渣作！
come on!

刚看到你这个留言~  你要表这么轻快~ 赶紧学习去！

lyslj001

先上今天的综合啦~
【TPO 14】 282words
The lecturer agrees with the reading passage that salvage logging is effective in some aspects in helping forests to recover after severe storms. She points out, however, several long term damages which are brought by salvage logging and which we must take into account.

First and foremost, clearing up dead trees may actually destroy the right conditions for others plants to thrive. According to the lecturer, it's these dead trees that enrich the soil in forests with nutrients. In another word, if dead trees are rapidly removed right after storms, their remained peers in forests will be lack of essential nutrients important for these plants to survive. The lecturer therefore claims that salvage logging will in some extent harm the forests, which contrasts with the opinion demonstrated in the reading passage.

Second, the lecturer admits that dead trees tend to create suitable habitat for injurious insects, resulting in series of problems. But she also argues that those pests may have already existed on the trees for over a hundred years. In addition, not only will decaying wood provide homes for harmful insects, but they also enable helpful animals, such as birds to settle down, contributing to the healthy growth of the whole forests.

Furthermore, the lecturer also casts doubt on the statement made in the passage that salvage logging has economic benefits. In fact, cutting down and terming dead trees into useable wood can raise huge amounts of money, undermining the expected economic effects. Moreover, despite the additional jobs salvage logging may create, plentiful experience and other strict requirements will also stop local workers from applying for these temporary jobs. The facts above strongly prove that salvage logging contributes little to the local economics.

lyslj001

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.
【513 WORDS】
（格式出现了点问题，正文就改到下面一栏啦~)

lyslj001

Tired from a whole day's works, a person usually selects his favoriteway to relax. Some individuals may turn to varieties of movies and books, makingthe assertion that it is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a bookthan by doing physical exercise. As far as I am concerned, however, thisstatement is somewhat exaggerated and in reality, doing exercises is an equalor even better choices.

Admittedly, nobody can disclaim that watching movies and readingbooks are both relaxing in some aspects. When individuals are attracted tothose appealing plots in books and movies, they distract themselves from fiercecompetitions and heavy pressures. This kind of relaxation, however, is oftentemporary. It means that when finish the magic stories, people have no otherchoices but to return back to their real life and face all those tough stuffsagain. In addition, this kind of relaxing also brings series of problems suchas eyesight degradation, poor physical health resulted from less exercise, anda lack of essential social interactions as well. By contrast, physical exercisefixes all these problems. Not only will individuals obtain enough relaxation,but they acquire qualities crucial for their future careers.

On the one hand, people will have easy access to enough relaxation throughphysical sports. Take playing tennis as an instance, instead of simply brainworks, people concentrate themselves on specific movements of the whole bodies,such as how to hit the ball from a right angle Without complex formulas andfiles filled with words, brains get valuable chances to relax. Moreover,through consistently shouting and laughing, people release their depressive emotions,totally cleaning up garbage deposited on minds. According to a recent research,students who regularly exercise tend to make better performances in academicsthan those who do not. Compared with the short-term effects from eitherwatching movies or reading books, the benefits of exercise are apparently morepractical and lasting. Because it helps people both relax well and concentrate on their tasks better in the long run.

On the other hand, through exercise, people gain qualities andabilities which contribute to their further advancement in careers. First, exerciseis a traditional way to strengthen bodies. And a strong body enables the personto work for a long time and deal with multiple tasks without being disturbed byfrequent sicknesses. Second, doing sports also enhance people's abilities ofteam works. During the process, people learn how to trust others whennecessary, present their unique ideas and maximize the achievements throughteam works. Just as people cooperate well with each other in a sports team, incareer, they will get along well with their colleagues, struggle to finish jobsbefore the deadline, and defeat other competitors in the market. Finally, they willstep in the success in careers. To this extent, physical exercise appears againto a better way to relax than movies and books since it brings people morebenefits besides just relaxation.

In a nutshell, doing physical exercise is so important a way to helppeople relax that it is in some extent even more efficacious thanwatching movies and reading books. This method helps individuals relax better,strengthens their bodies, and improves their skills in social interactions,enabling them to live better life in the future.

Mint静默

0 0楼主的作文字数好多啊！
求问你是怎么拓展思路的

lyslj001

Mint静默 发表于 2013-8-21 19:51
0 0楼主的作文字数好多啊！
求问你是怎么拓展思路的

回M酱君~ 字数多不一定好呀。 并且其实我又写超时了= =   总之我写作文时候会有强烈的欲望把逻辑链写清楚，尽量让读文章的人能理解我的思路。于是写着写着就hold不住了~   不过要说字数多，可以去看sallygreen姐姐的文章！哈哈           但是！据说，如果文笔一般，写很多确实是一种的高分的手段~

sallygreen

lyslj001 发表于 2013-8-21 20:09
回M酱君~ 字数多不一定好呀。 并且其实我又写超时了= =   总之我写作文时候会有强烈的欲望把逻辑链写清楚 ...

额，求lyslj童鞋轻黑 ~ 你的文文我晚点给改哈

lyslj001

sallygreen 发表于 2013-8-21 22:55
额，求lyslj童鞋轻黑 ~ 你的文文我晚点给改哈

好吧...其实我已经跟你写的差不多字数了  我们都是苦口婆心的银~