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普渡哥

The ultimately goal of education not only give us the freedom of minds and spirits, but also t each us to consider sensibly and positively. And it bridges the theory and development of humans only when we treat the information education tries to convey calmly and objectively.

give+s  ,consider换成think更好，我觉得。humans 应该用human beings?

另外，能不能分解下这句的句式？
And it bridges the theory and development of humans only when we treat the information education tries to convey calmly and objectively.

glacier_girl

普渡哥 发表于 2013-6-25 12:45
The ultimately goal of education not only give us the freedom of minds and spirits, but also t each  ...

谢谢版主～
And it bridges the theory and development of humans only when we treat the information education tries to convey calmly and objectively.
这句话我想表达的是：只有冷静客观对待教育传达的信息，教育中的理论才能和人类发展结合起来，句子读起来是很怪，写完也没看就上传了，我也分析出来到底什么句式，语法都忘了。。。怎么办？
改成倒装会不会好一些：Only when we treat the information that education tries to convey calmly and objectively, can the education bridge the gap between theory and practice.

求指导。。

wxyzhd

改好了，请查收，谢谢

wxyzhd

改好了，请查收，谢谢