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 楼主| 发表于 2017-2-6 17:56:22 | 显示全部楼层
剪布石 发表于 2017-2-2 22:27
楼主 题目是什么啊

大部分的没有收集到题目,只有个范文。。
 楼主| 发表于 2017-2-6 17:58:34 | 显示全部楼层


【41】

      The author rejects the claim that the loud engine noise of American-made
MotorcycleX appeals to the manufacturer's customers and explains why they are not
attracted to quieter, foreign-made imitations. The author's rejection is based on two
reasons.First, the author points out that foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar
American-madecars, yet they sell just as well. Secondly, the author claims that ads for
MotorcycleX do not emphasize its engine noise; instead, the ads highlight its durability
and sleeklines, and employ voice-overs of rock music rather than engine roar. In my
view,these reasons do not establish that the quieter engines of the foreignimitations fail
toaccount for their lack of appeal.
       To begin with, the first reason rests on the assumption that what automobile
customers find appealing is analogous to what motorcycle customers find appealing.
This assumption is weak, since although there are points of comparison between
automobiles and motorcycles, there are many dissimilarities as well. For example,
headroom,smooth ride, and quiet engines are usually desirable qualities in a car.
However,headroom is not a consideration for motorcycle customers; and many
motorcycleriders specifically want an exciting, challenging ride, not a smooth one. The
same maybe true of engine noise; it is possible that motorcyclists like what loudengine
noise adds to the experience of motorcycle riding.
       The author's second reason is also problematic. Although the engine noise of
MotorcycleX is not explicitly touted in advertisements, it does not necessarily follow
that engine noise is not an important selling feature. Because Motorcycle X has been
manufactured in the U.S. for over 70 years, its reputation for engine noise is probably
already well known and need not be advertised. Moreover, the advertisers might use
rock music on Motorcycle X ad soundtracks for the specific purpose of suggesting, or
even simulating, its loud engine noise.
       In conclusion, this author has not provided convincing reasons for rejecting the
claim that quieter engines make foreign-made motorcycles less popular. The author's
analogy involving foreign car sales is weak, and the claim about Motorcycle X
advertisements misses the purpose of including rock music in the ads.

 楼主| 发表于 2017-2-8 16:28:23 | 显示全部楼层


【42】
        The author of this article argues that, to reverse declining revenues from campus
housing rentals, campus housing officials should decrease the number of available
housing units and reduce rent prices on the units. The author's line of reasoning isthat
fewer available units will limit supply while lower rents will increase demand,thereby
improving overall occupancy rates, and that the resulting increase in occupancy rates
will, inturn, boost revenues for the campus. This reasoning is unconvincing for several
reasons.
       To begin with, the author assumes that boosting occupancy rates will improve
revenues.All other factors remaining unchanged, this would be the case. However, the
author proposes reducing both the supply of units and their rental prices. Both ofthese
actions would tend to reduce revenues. The author provides no evidence that the
revenue-enhancing effect of a higher occupancy rate will exceed the revenue-decreasing
effect ofreduced supply and price. Without such evidence, the argument is
unconvincing.
       Secondly, the author assumes that lowering rents will lead to higher revenues by
increasing demand. However, it is possible that demand would decrease, depending on
the extent of the rent reduction as well as other factors—such as overallenrollment and
the supply and relative cost of off-campus housing. Moreover, even if demandincreases
by lowering rents, revenues will not necessarily increase as a result. Otherfactors, such
as maintenance and other costs of providing campus housing units and the reduced
supply ofrental units might contribute to a net decrease in revenue.
       Thirdly,in asserting that lowering rental rates will increase demand, the author
assumes that current rental rates are causing low demand. However, low demand for
student housing could be a function of other factors. For instance, the student housing
units maybe old and poorly maintained. Perhaps students find the campus housing rules
oppressive,and therefore prefer to live off-campus; or perhaps enrollments are down
generally,affecting campus housing occupancy.
       In conclusion, the author of this editorial has not argued effectively for a decrease
in thenumber of available campus housing units and a reduction in rental rates forthose
units. Tostrengthen the argument, the author must show that a rent reduction will
actually increase demand, and that the revenue-enhancing effect of greater demand will
out weighthe revenue-reducing effect of a smaller supply and of lower rental rates.

 楼主| 发表于 2017-2-10 15:13:40 | 显示全部楼层

【43】

       The conclusion in this Avia Airlines memorandum is that a review of the airline's
baggage-handling procedures will not further its goal of maintaining or increasing the
number of Avia passengers. The author's line of reasoning is that the great majority of
Avia passengers are happy with baggage handling at the airline because only one
percent of passengers who traveled on Avia last year filed a complaint about Avia's
procedures.This argument is problematic in two important respects.
       First, the argument turns on the assumption that the 99 percent of Avia passengers
who didnot complain were happy with the airline's baggage-handling procedures.
However,the author provides no evidence to support this assumption. The fact that, on
theaverage, 9 out of 1000 passengers took the time and effort to formally complain
indicates nothing about the experiences or attitudes of the remaining 991. It is possible
that many passengers were displeased but too busy to formally complain, while others
had no opinion at all. Lacking more complete information about passengers' attitudes,
we cannot assume that the great majority of passengers who did not complain were
happy.
       Secondly, in the absence of information about the number of passengers per flight
and about the complaint records of competing airlines, the statistics presented in the
memorandum might distort the seriousness of the problem. Given that most modern
aircraft carry as many as 300 to 500 passengers, it is possible that Avia received as
many as 4or 5 complaints per flight. The author unfairly trivializes this record.
Moreover, the author fails to compare Avia's record with those of its competitors. It is
possible that a particular competitor received virtually no baggage-handling complaints
lastyear. If so, Avia's one percent complaint rate might be significant enough to
motivate customers to switch to another airline.
       In conclusion, the author has failed to demonstrate that a review of the baggage-
handling procedures at Avia Airlines is not needed to maintain or increase the number
of Avia'spassengers. To strengthen the argument, the author must at the very least
provide affirmative evidence that most Avia passengers last year were indeed happy
with baggage-handling procedures. To better evaluate the argument, we would need
more information about the numbers of Avia passengers per flight last year and about
the baggage-handling records of Avia's competitors.

 楼主| 发表于 2017-2-13 15:14:33 | 显示全部楼层


【44】
     The author of this article argues that the country of Sacchar can best solve its
current trade deficit problem by lowering the price of its main export, sugar. The lineof
reasoning is that this action would make Sacchar more competitive with other sugar-
exporting countries, thereby increasing sales of Sacchar's sugar abroad and, in turn,
substantially reducing the trade-deficit. This line of reasoning is unconvincing for a
couple ofreasons.
       In the first place, this argument is based on an oversimplified analysis of thetrade
deficit problem Sacchar currently faces. A trade-deficit occurs when a country spends
more onimports than it earns from exports. The author's argument relies on the
assumption that earnings from imports will remain constant. However, the author
provides no evidence that substantiates this assumption. It is possible that revenuesfrom
imports will increase dramatically in the near future; if so, the course of actionproposed
by the authormight be unnecessary to solve Sacchar's trade deficit problem. Conversely,
it ispossible that revenues from imports are likely to decrease dramatically in thenear
future.To the extent that this is the case, lowering sugar prices may have a negligible
countervailingeffect, depending on the demand for Sacchar's sugar.
       In the second place, increasing sales by lowering the price of sugar will notyield
anincrease in income unless the increase in sales is sufficient to overcome theloss in
income due to the lower price. This raises three questions the author fails toaddress.
First,will a price decrease in fact stimulate demand? Second, is demand sufficient to
meet the increase in supply? Third, can Sacchar increase the sugar production
sufficientlyto overcome the deficit? In the absence of answers to these questions, we
cannot assess the author's proposal.
       In conclusion, the author provides an incomplete analysis of the problem and, as a
result,provides a questionable solution. To better evaluate the proposal, we wouldneed
to knowhow revenues from imports are likely to change in the future. To strengthen the
argument,the author must provide evidence that demand is sufficient to meet the
propose dincrease in supply, and that Sacchar has sufficient resources to accommodate
the increase.

发表于 2017-4-21 22:38:46 | 显示全部楼层
谢谢楼主!比心
发表于 2017-5-9 15:01:00 | 显示全部楼层
Aspartame vs. sugar
People who use the artificial sweetener aspartame are better off consuming sugar, since aspartame are actually contribute to weight gain rather than weight loss. For example, high levels of aspartame have been shown to trigger a craving for food by depleting the brain of a chemical that registers satiety, or the sense of being full. Furthermore, the studies suggest that sugars, if consumed after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, actually the body’s ability to burn fat. Consequently, those who drink aspartame-sweetened juices after exercise will also lose this calorie-burning benefit. Thus it appears that people consuming aspartame rather than sugar are unlikely to achieve their dietary goals.

In this argument, the author concluded that aspartame does not contribute to weight loss as the sugar do. He manipulated two reasons to support his position. First is that high level of aspartame consuming will trigger more demand for food. Second is that sugar but not aspartame, if took after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, can help to burn the body’s fat. This argument is neither sound nor convinced for below reasons.
First, the author failed to compare comparing objects, or sugar and aspartame, on the same ground. Just as in his first reason he utilized to support his final conclusion, he just mentioned sugar’s benefit for weight losing. However, he explained nothing about aspartame in this aspect. Without this kind of direct comparing, this findings about sugar should be used as a cause to reach the final conclusion that aspartame does no help for achieving dietary goals.
Second, still focusing on the first excuse. The author said that high level of aspartame will deplete the brain of chemical that controls human sense of being full or statiety. One concern is how high level it is. Can that high level of consuming aspartame be too high to obtain in our daily live. If the level for aspartame consumption to cause brain to secrete the chemical is too high, as such 10 kilograms of aspartame consuming is the minimum amount for causing brain chemical, we will have more confidence to refuse this findings as one reason for author’s final conclusion.
Adding all analyses together, the author failed to compare aspartame and sugar at the same ground. He did not provide more information about high level for evaluating whether or not it is easy to get that level. So at the current stage, his final conclusion citing that consuming aspartame but not sugar is difficult to achieve dietary goals.

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发表于 2017-5-10 19:07:47 | 显示全部楼层
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