鼓起勇气发一篇自己写的AA11

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自己修改作文的能力很差，发一篇上来，请大家指正！ 轻点拍啊！别把我的勇气又给打回去了！

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Date: 2005-6-30

Time: 12:49:50

Argument No.11

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Question:

The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

`In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro.~

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Your Answer:

In this argument, the author concludes that the residents of San Perdito should vote Varro again as the mayor. To support his conclusion, the author claims that the population has decreased and unemployment rate has increased the in the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city. Then the author further point out that in the Varro years such situation is on the contrary that the population increased and the unemployment rate decreased. And last, the author assumes that the depressed economy was caused by the mayor of the city. These arguments seem to be solid and reasonable at the first sight, however, we can find out how weak and irrational it is if we look deeper into this argument. I will point out why the conclusion is problematic from the following aspects:

To begin with, the author oversimplified that the population decreased and the employment rate increased do necessarily mean that was Montoya cause. The author has obviously overlooked other factors that might contribute to the result that the economy is depressed. It is possible that the global economy is declined, not only the city of San Perdito subject to this depression, the other city and even whole country is facing such situation. From this example, we can see that the author attributing the good economical condition to the Varro is not convinced. Thus, we cannot accept this conclusion without ruling out such possibility.

Another problem with the argument is that the author rests on a groundless assumption that the more closing businesses than the opening businesses mean that the economy is not thrive. However, the author did not provide any evidence to prove his views. He fails to take into account that maybe such activity is helping development of the city. It is likely that the old businesses cannot make profitable and always cannot make the both end meet but the new businesses can gain much more profits. It is also likely that the old businesses put out so many wastes to damage the environment of the city. But the new businesses can avoid these things. All the factors, if true, would show that closing the old businesses can benefit the city. Therefore, unless the author can provide other possibilities, this argument is unwarranted.

To sum up, this argument is weak. To make this argument illogically acceptable, the author must provide the strong evidence to prove that the population decreased and the employment rate increased was caused by the Montoya. And the author also has to point out that closing the old businesses really injured the economy of the city.

zj1179

真的太谢谢happyfish了，让我有恍然大悟的感觉！一直都不知道作文该怎么改，现在心里有些谱了！ 谢谢你！