AI112: Issue是偶的弱项！但又没时间，偏偏考试他排最前面，无语

timzhou

Your writting skill is good, I bet. If I were ETS , your AWA score will be 5 or even higher than that.

Anyway, I t still think you can make some improvements.

Firstly, after reading the issue, I feel a little bit wordy, especially you reiterate your argument "a mixed blessing" for so many times without any change in the expression.

Secondly, I think you can strength the negtive aspect s of the advance in business and technology.  Compared with the positive parts, the latter seems less convincing.

Thirdly, You make a smill mistake, Zhouzhuang is not a village of zhejiang province, It located in Jiangzu, hehe!