TWE135(最后一篇，25分钟写的)

听着smashing pumpkins的Lily（my one and only）写的，也是考试前的my one and only了。135是写该不该穿校服。

Nowadays, when some clichés such（少了个as吧，这种低级错误可不能在考场上犯）“Boy’s hair should not touch collar” or “Girls’ skirts should not be longer than knees” have been buried into oblivion, I am amazed to hear the requirement that all students should wear school uniforms. Of course, the people who assert such a judgment（不够严谨，前文有讲judgment吗？） would put forward some benefits brought out by （用of就可以了）wearing uniforms. However, their reasoning might not be borne out of（少见的表达） careful analysis, and in my opinion, young boys and girls surely have their rights to chooses clothes to wear, which would grant them their own identities and personalities（要独成一句）.

（开头没有主题句，扣分。要想应付ETS的考试，有时就得让自己变得功利一些，愚蠢一些。）Learning is an open-ended and all inclusive term that can occur at any time in any place. Then why the youths would choose schools? Because one manifest characteristic of education or schooling is that it provides a place where the young could shape their inclination, mature their personality and widen their horizon. Particularly, high school students, at the stage of adolescence, are desperately seeking for their own personalities. For example, some students fascinated with rock and roll would wear a large T-shirt with the image of Suede and jeans with holes; some fashionable girls perhaps choose a classic dress. The T-shirt, the dress and so forth help express their own characteristics. On the other hand, if all students wear the same clothes which make them look like some products in the same factory; don’t you feel ridiculous and sad? After all, schools differ from factories in that schools could not impose the same standard to every student.

Furthermore, wearing clothes according students’ choices is instrumental rather than detrimental to the communication between students and faculty. Some people argue that uniforms have an advantage of fairness, that is to say, teachers would not judge a student according to his or her wearing. In fact, for one thing, it is unfair to say that a teacher would discriminate any student because of his or her clothes.(这部分与你的主题没太大关系。) For another, judging from the student’s wearing is more often than not conducive to the communication between a teacher and a student since the teacher will know the personality of the student and choose an appropriate way to advise him or her. 这一段的思想很好，但表达上有些中文化，俺试着改写一下：Furthermore, wearing clothes according to students' own choices is instrumental rather than distrimental to the communication between students and faculty. Often enough, different dressing styles reveal different personalities of students, which can help teachers tailor-make mentoring and teaching approaches for each individul student. A good example to the point is that...

Some other claims of those who support uniforms are not so persuasive as they seem at first glance. For example, would uniforms reduce violence in school or decrease the rate of traffic accidents? In my opinion, wearing is indeed an indicator of many things especially the characteristics of students, but it is far away from changing the behaviors and habits of students.

Admittedly, wearing uniforms have some advantages as claimed like creating unity atmosphere. However, according to the discussion above, requiring all students to wear uniforms is not a wise advice as it sounds to some people. I hope I could see students of their own colorful clothes whenever I step to a school.

P.S. Thanks for your nice gift!

动了手术后的：

Nowadays, when some clichés such as “Boy’s hair should not touch collar” or “Girls’ skirts should not be longer than knees” have been buried into oblivion, I am amazed to hear the requirement that all students should wear school uniforms. Of course, the people who advocate students to wear uniforms would put forward some benefits of wearing uniforms. However, their reasoning might not reasonable as it seems at first glance.As far as I am concerned, young boys and girls surely have their rights to choose what kind of clothes to wear. In this essay, I will lay down two conspicuous reasons to substantiate my view.

First of all, clothes are indicators of personalities, especially for high school students who are desperately seeking for their own identities. For example, some students fascinated with rock and roll would wear a large T-shirt with the image of Suede and jeans with holes; some fashionable girls perhaps choose a classic dress. The T-shirt, the dress and so forth help express their own characteristics. On the other hand, if all students wear the same clothes which make them look like some products in the same factory; don’t you feel ridiculous and a bit sad? Anyway, schools differ from factories and other places in that one manifest characteristic of education or schooling is to provide a place where the young could shape their inclination and mature their personality.

Furthermore, wearing clothes according to students’ choices is instrumental rather than detrimental to the communication between students and faculty. Often enough, different dressing styles reveal different personalities of students, which can help teachers tailor-make mentoring and teaching approaches for each individual student. A good example to this point is that a teacher could encourage a student more effectively to spend more time on study with the beginning of discussing the basketball star on his T-shirt.

Admittedly, wearing uniforms does have some advantages including creating a unity and saving money on clothes.And those claiming that students should wear uniforms often go on to assert that uniforms could reduce violence in school or decrease the rate of traffic accidents. In my opinion, although wearing is indeed an indicator of many things especially the characteristics, it is far away from changing the behaviors and habits of students.

From the discussion above, it is clear that requiring all students to wear uniforms is not wise advice students' own clothes would express their personalities and enhance communication. After all, schools are the place for students to show themselves in academics, in daily dress as well as other aspects.