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39. “It is difficult for people to achieve professional success without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life.”

The issue whether people could achieve professional success without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life is a complex one. Whereas some may contend that it is difficult to take a deft balance of professional life, family life and personal interests, other people may hold an opposite view that it is possible and necessary for people to take such a balance. Recognizing a proper solution to this problem should only be achieved by incorporating all relevant aspects, I will present my view in the following discuss.

On the one hand, for people planning to achieve any professional success, long time of work is necessary, thus making it difficult for people to fulfill personal lives at the same time as to do the jobs. The problem is that one’s time is limited. If one devotes more time to work, he will sure lose time for other activities, such as eating with the family, contacting friends, or doing his hobbies. It is inevitable that professional success people do not have perfect personal lives. For example, some people working in a Fortune 500 company may be viewed as symbols achieving career success, but they have to work more than 70 hours per week and seldom have times for their own. A passage from a magazine said that more than 40 percent of female employees working in Big four are single, just because they do not have time to date. What’s more, it is vigorously competitive working in these companies. Even though one has the desire to balance professional success and personal life, it is highly possible that he may not achieve this goal, since these companies usually have a “bottom-line” program demanding any employee’s productivity under this line be fired.

On the other hand, in some cases personal life fulfillments just do good to one’s professional life and one’s professional life is even relied on the personal life. Firstly, some hobbies, such as music, can help one to relax and to reduce press. What’s more, they may as well enhance one’s memory or creativity, as illustrated by Albert Einstein and Allen Greenspan who are both good at playing violin. Second, personal life is crucial to guarantee a professional success sometimes. For example, some business people take fixed time to join some club so as to meet different people in their field, a mean to broad their business.  

In sum, the speaker’s view deserves some merits, because it comply with common sense and our experiences. However, the speaker broadens it to an immutable extreme that it fails to apply to every circumstance.