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[原创]我又写作文了:AI097

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楼主
发表于 2005-6-19 13:05:00 | 只看该作者

[原创]我又写作文了:AI097

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Date: 2005-6-19
Time: 9:56:08
Issue No.97
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Question:


`In order to understand a society, we must examine the contents of its museums and the subjects of its memorials. What a society chooses to preserve, display, and commemorate is the truest indicator of what the society values.

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your position with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

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Your Answer:

The author above asserts that we should examine the contents of a society's museums and subjects of its memorials in order to understand it, a claim which I could not agree more.

In the first place, museums and memorials always contain plenty of the subjects and records which are considered to be the pride of the society. People of the society choose to display them to show what they value and to share them with visitors. For instance, in China, we are so proud of our long history that almost every city in China has a history museum; we are so proud of the heroes who devote themselves in the revolutionary battles that we built a brilliant memorial in Tian An Men Square, the largest square in the world.

In the second place, the museums and the subjects of memorials are always easy for an outsider to visit, because they are always public places. The most efficient way to understand the society is a visit to these places in order to apprehend the value and to sense the share.

In addition to the condition discussed above, people may argue that there are some other ways to understand a society and we do not have to examine the content of its museums and the subjects of its memorials. I admit it is not besides the condition but in fact does not affect the main conclusion. We could have other accesses to get our goal, for example, to read some guide book, or to talk with local people, etc. However, museums and memorials are the best way under our feet while others could be the supplement.

Thus, we could safely get the conclusion that it is necessary to examine the contents of the museums and the memorials for anyone who plans to learn more thoroughly and more extensively about a society's history, value, and custom. That is indeed a good advice for travellers to follow in order to enjoy their trip and to gain more acknowledge during their journey.

还是只有300多字...sigh...


沙发
发表于 2005-6-19 16:16:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用happyfish0517在2005-6-19 13:05:00的发言:

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Date: 2005-6-19
Time: 9:56:08
Issue No.96
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Question:



`In order to understand a society, we must examine the contents of its museums and the subjects of its memorials. What a society chooses to preserve, display, and commemorate is the truest indicator of what the society values.


Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your position with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.


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Your Answer:


The author above asserts that we should examine the contents of a society's museums and subjects of its memorials in order to understand it, a claim which I could not agree more.


呵呵之所以字数少就是因为姐姐不愿意说废话。第一段可以多少说点废话,GMAT的作文可以不象中文作文那样追求凤头。


In the first place, museums and memorials always contain plenty of the subjects and records which are considered to be the pride of the society. People of the society choose to display them to show what they value and to share them with visitors. For instance, in China, we are so proud of our long history that almost every city in China has a history museum; we are so proud of the heroes who devote themselves in the revolutionary battles that we built a brilliant memorial in Tian An Men Square, the largest square in the world.


In the second place, the museums and the subjects of memorials are always easy for an outsider to visit, because they are always public places. The most efficient way to understand the society is a visit to these places in order to apprehend the value and to sense the share.


In addition to the condition discussed above, people may argue that there are


个人觉得这一句不大符合逻辑,fish姐姐怎么看?


some other ways to understand a society and we do not have to examine the content of its museums and the subjects of its memorials. I admit it is not besides the condition but in fact does not affect the main conclusion. We could have other accesses to get our goal, for example, to read some guide book, or to talk with local people, etc. However, museums and memorials are the best way under our feet while others could be the supplement.


Thus, we could safely get the conclusion that it is necessary to examine the contents of the museums and the memorials for anyone who plans to learn more thoroughly and more extensively about a society's history, value, and custom. That is indeed a good advice for travellers to follow in order to enjoy their trip and to gain more acknowledge during their journey.


knowledge


还是只有300多字...sigh...



姐姐的文风简洁干练,但是有的时候不妨说些废话用一些复杂的句式.如一个定语从句套n个小定语从句之类的,吓死ETS!我觉得以姐姐的功力应该可以使用一些比较拽的高级词汇.具体做法可以参考rohd斑斑的模版改造大法。

板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-19 17:23:00 | 只看该作者

In addition to the condition discussed above, people may argue that there are


哈哈,因为我写作文的习惯是,先把第一段,最后一段,以及中间三段的开头一个短语或句子写出来,再慢慢补充中间三段的论证...所以这句话前半句话是开头写的,后半句话是后来写的...没衔接...汗!!呵呵,不过我觉得这种方法还蛮好的...防止最后写不完没结尾...

地板
 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-19 17:34:00 | 只看该作者

应该可以使用一些比较拽的高级词汇.具体做法可以参考rohd斑斑的模版改造大法。




汗!我心中最大的痛,就是词汇量奇少...还有judy能不能把罗德斑斑的模版改造大法给个链接??我在置顶贴里好像没有找到!~~谢谢!~~

5#
发表于 2005-6-19 18:36:00 | 只看该作者

http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=26&ID=76404&page=1


姐姐可以使用坛子的搜索功能。

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-19 23:42:00 | 只看该作者

恩...谢谢...可能我比较笨,搜索rohd和模版改造都没搜索到...再次谢谢judy...

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