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大学往往让学生通过TEAM WORK完成PROJECT,然后给TEAM MEMBER打上同样的分数,你觉得这样好吗?

Advantages:

1 save time for those who are not interested

2 develop a sense of team spirit, learn from each other

3 easier to evaluate

Shortcomings:

1 容易影响部分人的积极性，增长一些的惰性，他们自己也没有进步

2 这样样的结果会导致整体工作效率低下，

3从管理人员来说不利于对每个个体的表现进行一个很客观的evaluation，不利于设立奖励惩罚机制

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In university students are often assigned team projects in which they are required to work in teams. Scoring methods may vary from project to project. Some projects are evaluated in such a way that team members from the same team get the same score, while some are scored according to individual performance. There are many other scoring methods. Different people hold different opinions toward them. For me, I am not in favor of the same-score-for-every-teammate method.

First, assume everyone on a team is given the same grade, no one gets benefit. For those who work their butts off, this is unfair and will discourage them from working hard and learning relevant knowledge. For the disinterested, this will encourage them keeping contributing nothing to the team and prevent them from any progress for themselves. As a result, the seemingly team-building scoring method for a teacher prove detrimental for every student’s development.

Second, if no one is willing to contribute to the project, the whole team and even the entire class becomes inefficient and stagnant in the project status, not to mention to achieve noticeable fruits. Therefore, the teacher’s task remains unfinished, teaching strategy undemonstrated, and work  archive impossible to complete. This may even ruin the school’s reputation since it makes everyone looks guilty and lazy.

Third, due to the different performance of each individual, the teacher does not have a objective view of each student’s studying capability and practical skills. It will impede the teacher from tailoring their way of teaching to the needs of each student and thus affect the overall education quality negatively. It will also not conduce to building a incentive system in order to increase overall competition.

Unlike any scoring method, I believe, instead, an integrated scoring method in which each team player should be graded by both team performance and individual performance, is the best. For example, we can make team performance accounts for 40% of overall grade and the latter accounts for the left 60%. Only in this way, fostering of team work is emphasized without the cost of overall fairness, competition and everyone’s vitality and willingness to contribute and to learn.

Phrases:

assign sb sth

conduce to sth

increase competition

第一，用第一，第二这样的开头，向来不投我所好。因为这样的开头太常见了。如果我是考官，这点上就打折扣。

第二，总结性的段落，我觉得应该有标志词。可没有标志词的出现。TWE也好，AWA也好，都有固定的，或类似的八股模式。我觉得，段前的标志词是不可或缺的。如果本来例证就单薄，又在文章结构上打折，就会使文章更单薄了。

第三，请LZ在写完作文后再查一遍细小的语法点有没有问题。小细节对分数可能也会有一点影响。例如，句子的开头的单词的形式，to到底是介词还是不定式，一个句子的对称性如何等。虽然在总体看来没什么。因为毕竟不是考语法。但也是要引起注意的。

第四，从内容上看。

1）LZ觉得，你喜欢听一个积极意义上的话，还是消极意义上的表态？至少，我觉得，我喜欢积极向上的状态。所以，如果可以正面表态的，我不会说反话。要是我是LZ，第一段的最后一句我不会这样表达： For me, I am not in favor of the same-score-for-every-teammate method.我宁可说I am in favor of...我不清楚到底IBT是机批作文还是人批。如果是人批，这样的句子是不利的。

2）在文章的用词方面，请LZ也注意一下，用词不要太极端。诸如最后一段里的Only in this way...方法是多样的.意见是不能强加的,不是吗?虽然给出了例子,但有些例子可能也是具有片面性的.有些问题可能还没有考虑的.所以,最好不要把话说满.留有些余地比较好.

真是不好意思,我的水平也不咋地.若有说的过分或得罪的地方请LZ见谅.我现在这里提前道歉.

呵呵不用道歉了

谢谢你指点才是！

举例和内容先不说。语言太幼稚而且不准确，太中式英语了，句法也太简单。建议多背些好文章。这样的文章最多22

重新又看了一边，LZ的写作功底实在不敢恭维。句子间的连接也非常不好，而且很明显是往见过的句子里面套，但套得很不好。还自创了一些说法，但是看上去非常奇怪。

从句子间的代词使用也明显看出LZ平时没有让英语水平高的人给自己改过文章，或者平时很少写文章。

再说文章逻辑，LZ在写的时候自己加上了题目背景没有的限制比如“First, assume everyone on a team is given the same grade, no one gets benefit ”谁说打一样的分就会no one gets benefit ？？假设我就是什么都不干的人，我当然有benefit。举例的时候一定要慎用极限词！

还有“Second, if no one is willing to contribute to the project”这个情况完全是你想象的。ETS很看重举例的内容以及合适程度，你这句话一加上，正段不仅白写，而且倒扣分。

你第一段就进行了错误的假设，第二段又是建立在第一段的结果上。三段举例其中的两段有条件错误，再加上语言很不地道且生硬。文章最高21分。我不是打击楼主，给你打27分得那个人是很不负责任的...要是让李笑来给你打分估计能到18就不错，上过它写作班的人都明白我什么意思...