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TWE 164 请大牛们帮忙指正

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楼主
发表于 2004-8-18 07:58:00 | 只看该作者

TWE 164 请大牛们帮忙指正

164 People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good heath?



With the development of society, there is so many ways that are good for human's heath and each of them has its own merits and demerits. Which one you prefer depends on your personal experience, life style and emotional concern. From my personal perspective, I maintain that doing exercise is the best way to stay healthy for a human. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.



No issue is more crucial than this one that keeping healthy by doing exercise furnishes much fun in people's life. To illustrate this point, some facts are very convincing to make it more persuasive: as you can see, Nowadays, more and more people are pressed by much stress in work and daily life so they need something to release them from these high pressures. Moreover the best approach to get rid of these stresses is going swimming, hiking, skiing, or cycling and also these sports usually bring much more interesting stuff to our life. Figuratively speaking, it is a self-evident fact that  birds  fly up to wide sky everyday, foraging, chasing, playing and exercising as well otherwise they could not fly and die and so do human beings. There is no better evidence to demonstrate the strength of this point.



Another chief reason for my propensity is that doing some exercise not only gives us more strong body but also makes more opportunities for us to know new friends. For instance, by taking part in a soccer game, which usually only involves young men, youths can make a lot of new friends there. Furthermore sports also give people more chances to know each other between teenagers and old persons. The more clearly you see that, the more deeply you can understand it.



Admittedly, there is no denying that other activities, such as reading, traveling, talking and walking, benefit a person's physical and spiritual health, while they have a large number of limitations that doing exercise does not have in terms of money and time. Therefore, to minimize the losses and maximize the gains, we should first of all make a sound decision on the optimum time of departure. When the advantages and disadvantages of doing sports and other activities are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious.


All in all, given the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes interweave to form an organic whole and hence become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that to stay healthy for human beings doing exercise is the most excellent way. Only by doing exercise can human beings stay healthy, procure fun and get more friends at the same time.
沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-18 09:48:00 | 只看该作者

183 Film can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movie?

With the development of movie, there are so many films produced by various countries, representing different characteristics of countries. Which aspect you can learn from distinctive films from various countries depends on your personal experience, life style and emotional concern. From my point of view, I hold that by watching films we procure a lot of information about the culture in the country which produces this movie. In he following discussion, I would like reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more crucial that this one that the culture in the country which produce the film must be uncovered by the actors or actresses in the film. To illustrate this point, some facts are very convincing to make it more persuasive: as you can see, most movies producing by some country regardless of its style should include lots of people in the movie and thus these people will render their culture though their performance owing to their inherent qualities. Figuratively speaking, like a movie, a person's speaking must expose his or her personality and this is a self-evident fact. There is no better evidence to demonstrate the strength of this point.

Another chief reason for my propensity is that the culture is concluded in the film unconsciously by the story. A film must tell a story or fiction and thus this story gives us culture information and knowledge about the country. For instance, in my country, red broomcorn, a film reflecting the living in our rural areas, tell us a story about our country's rural culture, including folk songs, dances, wines they drink in daily life. The more clearly you see that, the more deeply you can understand it.

Admittedly, there is no denying that so many properties could be drawn from a film. They give you strong or weak impression out of the film about the country. However, maximize the affections you feel throughout the film, we should first of all make a sound decision on the optimum time of departure. When these characteristics are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious.

All in all, given the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes interweave to form an organic whole and hence become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that culture of the country is the foremost characteristic you can learn from a film made in that country. Only by recognizing the culture in the country in which the movie is produced can we really appreciate this film completely.

我在演练我的模板,大后天就考了,没时间了:(

板凳
发表于 2004-8-18 10:25:00 | 只看该作者

对不起,偶只看到第一句的半句话就忍不住上来冒充N了,

'there is so many ways"

我想你肯定知道怎么改的,这样的错误一定要在检查的时候改掉......

开的时候直接看到第二楼的题目,扫了第一段,觉得开头段有点累赘,而且似乎于题目有点偏离了......当然可能是受自己看到题目后所构思的印象...如果我看到那个标题,可能会写从电影中感受到US是个展望未来比较多的国家,因为他们常爱拍写展望未来的科幻片,而且不少都基本能在20年后变成现实......而前阵子看得一些片子使偶感到近期人文气候里的一种DEPRESSION,可能是即911和进入伊拉克后所带来的消极情绪所造成的

地板
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-18 11:09:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢MM, 这是笔误,只要有时间检查会改掉的,就怕没时间检查。

你说觉得我第2篇文章跑题了? 没明白你的意思,题目并没有明确指明是美国,所以我想也不能认为的缩小范围。

5#
发表于 2004-8-18 14:55:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用dutmcse在2004-8-18 9:48:00的发言:

183 Film can tell us a lot about the country where they were made. What have you learned about a country from watching its movie?









With the development of movie, there are so many films produced by various countries, representing different characteristics of countries. Which aspect you can learn from distinctive films from various countries depends on your personal experience, life style and emotional concern. From my point of view, I hold that by watching films we procure a lot of information about the culture in the country which produces this movie. In he following discussion, I would like reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.





No issue is more crucial that this one that the culture in the country which produce the film must be uncovered by the actors or actresses in the film. To illustrate this point, some facts are very convincing to make it more persuasive: as you can see, most movies producing (produced)by some country regardless of its style should include lots of people in the movie and thus these people will render their culture though their performance owing to their inherent qualities. Figuratively speaking, like a movie, a person's speaking must expose his or her personality and this is a self-evident fact. There is no better evidence to demonstrate the strength of this point.





Another chief reason for my propensity is that the culture is concluded (觉得用展示、可体现较好,如exposed,expressed)in the film unconsciously by the story. A film must tell a story or fiction and thus this story gives us culture information and knowledge about the country. For instance, in my country, red broomcorn, a film reflecting the living in our rural areas, tell ( tells)us a story about our country's rural culture, including folk songs, dances, wines they(people) drink in daily life. The more clearly you see that, the more deeply you can understand it.





Admittedly, there is no denying that so many properties could be drawn from a film. They give you strong or weak impression out of the film about the country. However, maximize (maximizing)the affections you feel throughout the film, we should first of all make a sound decision on the optimum time of departure. When these characteristics are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious.





All in all, given the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes interweave to form an organic whole and hence become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that culture of the country is the foremost characteristic you can learn from a film made in that country. Only by recognizing the culture in the country in which the movie is produced can we really appreciate this film completely.


我在演练我的模板,大后天就考了,没时间了:(


大家都要考试了,挤点时间看一下。

文章写得不错。

6#
发表于 2004-8-18 20:51:00 | 只看该作者

偶也没时间细看了

祝楼主成功

7#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-18 22:32:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢大家了,我现在最大的问题就是速度啊,总感觉30分钟太紧了。 只有靠这两天练习了,以前没有重视作文。

再次感谢大家的鼓励。

8#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-19 04:37:00 | 只看该作者

111 Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of time. Do you prefer to spend time alone or with friends?

With the development of society, there is more and more controversy over the issue about whether a person should spends his or her time with friends or alone. Some people think that spending time with friends should be a wise choice while others hold that it is better to stay alone. The two views are both right to some extent because each situation has its merits. The choice, nevertheless, is not easy to make. However I shall agree that the former one is more reasonable. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more crucial than this one that spending most of time with friends will give a person more fun and make his or her life more interesting. To illustrate this point, some facts are very convincing to make it more persuasive: as you can see, with friends, a people, who has gotten a lot of pressure from work and living, can completely relax, talking, playing, laughing with many friends. In human's life, fun is the fundamental factor to keep people healthy. Figuratively speaking, it is a self-evident fact that a bird cannot live without its companies. There is no better evidence to demonstrate the strength of this point.

Another chief reason for my propensity is that people can all learn a lot of knowledge and information when he or she is with many friends. Friends, who are close to a person, must have much knowledge that that person does not know or not grasp clearly. For instance, you procure a large amount of information about how to play a game or how to operate a computer if you are a teenager; you get much up-to-date information and knowledge regarding your work if you are an adult; you can learn different things from different friends if you are with them. The more clearly you see that, the more deeply you can understand it.

Admittedly, there is no denying that staying alone sometimes gives us more quiet leisure and time. Moreover, it will help you thinking about your life and your future. However, to minimize the losses and maximize the gains, we should first of all make a sound decision on the optimum time of departure. When the advantages and disadvantages of spending most of time with friends and staying alone in most of time are carefully compared, the most striking conclusion is obvious.

All in all, given the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes interweave to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is the foremost choice for a person regardless of the age that he or she spends most of time with many friends. Only by joining friends can a person gets the real relaxation and acquires much knowledge at the same time.

这篇是正好在30分钟内完成的,没有检查,速度真是个问题啊。

9#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-19 04:48:00 | 只看该作者

SIGH !  too many simple and stupid mistakes. all attribute to the tight time. Say I gotta shrink my article to make it done in twenty five minutes.

10#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-8-19 10:19:00 | 只看该作者

29 Some people believe that the earth is being harmed by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the earth a better place to live. What is you opinion?






With the development of modern society, there is more and more controversy over the issue about that whether human activity is damaging the earth or making the earth a better situation. Some people think that the earth is being harmed by human activity and becomes worse than before while others hold that the earth has been benefited by human activity. The two views are both right to some extent because each situation has its merits. The choice, nevertheless, is not easy to make. However I shall agree that the former one is more reasonable. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.





No issue is more crucial than this one that pollution made by human in daily life accounts for the reason why the environment of earth is becoming worse and worse. To illustrate this point, some facts are very convincing to make it more persuasive: as you can see, Nowadays, in big cities, more and more cars and other vehicles exhale too much pollution to our atmosphere. At the same time there are more and more industrial firms which make our water too toxic to drink appearing in our contemporary cities. There is no better evidence to demonstrate the strength of this point.





Another chief reason for my propensity is that human activity, such as over-hunting, over-fishing and over-disafforesting, demolishes the adaptable living environment of animals, which is ever a peaceful and quiet place for them. A large number of endangered animals hardly breathe on this dirty earth. For instance, in china, a lot of deer can be seen in the west of china before but now they are gone; in North America, a lot of beautiful birds can be seen before but now they are less; in the world, numerous  precious animals are chasing around before but now they can hardly be appreciated. The more clearly you see that, the more deeply you can understand it.





Admittedly, there is no denying that human activity does bring the earth some lucrative factors and thus makes our earth more beautiful, especially in rich areas. However, to measure the weight of the benefit and the harm that human has done on the earth, we should first of all make a sound decision on the optimum time of departure and consequently the most striking conclusion is obvious.





All in all, given the reasons mentioned above, which sometimes interweave to form an organic whole and hence become more persuasive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that the earth is becoming worse and worse owing to human activity. Only by recognizing these problems causing by human being can humanity render ourselves a better accommodation and bestow a better habitat for animals as well.


SIGH    感觉这篇真难写 :(  写完自己改了改。


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