[原创]【逵逵写作文8.0】TWE－126

likui · 发表于 2004-8-12 23:08:00

126 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Perhaps because of more experience older people gain, some people hold that there is nothing that youths can teach older people. Others, including me, however, are opposed to this perspective. The reasons are listed below.

First of all, youths have a wealth of modern knowledge. In order to qualify youths for the intense challenge in the future, institutes generally do their best to provide well-chosen knowledge to educate young people. It is important, especially according to the unparalleled explosion of knowledge. On the other hand, older people, who learned antiquated and limited knowledge decades of years age, are not able to follow social progress well. Of course, older people can retire and enjoy family happiness as they please. Alternatively, they can renew their knowledge with the youths’ help. For instance, in my city, when the summer vacation comes, some excellent students who specialize in computer science from major universities will go to communities to impart the knowledge of using computer and browsing the internet to older people.

Second, with respect to this argument, I think this is not dependent on age, experience and social status. Some older people view that they will be bereft of their pride if they ask youths questions. In realistic case, certain arrogant leaders are unwilling to learn from their subordinates and ignore sometimes the real wonderful ideas. Such phenomenon makes the operation inefficient. As a famous Chinese saying goes that there must a teacher in every three persons. Without doubt, every person knows something that others do not know.

Admittedly, older people have a difficult time due to the poor ability to accept new things. But it is advantageous in learning step by step. Moreover, it is better late than never.

As mentioned above, I recognize that there is much that older people can learn from youths. And both learn from each other can make things better.

enjoylife517 · 发表于 2004-8-13 04:17:00

前面行文流畅，用词变化多，表达清楚，祝贺逵逵的升级版本水平越来越高。

有点蛇尾：1、如果中间展开不错，admittedly这段简单一点也可以。

2、As（感觉在这里表达的还是不够确切，according to all） mentioned above, I recognize that there is much that older people can learn from youths. And both learn from each other can make things better.（有语法错误，改成，if the young and the old can teach and learn from each other, they will make the most things better. ）

pengstone · 发表于 2004-8-13 12:23:00

呵呵，KUIKUI写的都是高难度的题，偶平时都不敢写

下午再改，偶困了，昨天睡少了

zhoushao · 发表于 2004-8-13 13:18:00

斑竹的作文写的好.!!

但我提个小小的意见,the reasons are listed below.可以不要（我在一本书中看到这样写不好）

唐三彩 · 发表于 2004-8-13 16:08:00

问楼主一个低级问题，跟上时代的进步，这句话你用了follow social progress well

如果用keep up with the updated world closely. 可以吗？你一般写作文喜欢什么样的词汇？

snow_mountain · 发表于 2004-8-13 17:05:00

以下是引用唐三彩在2004-8-13 16:08:00的发言：

问楼主一个低级问题，跟上时代的进步，这句话你用了follow social progress well

如果用keep up with the updated world closely. 可以吗？你一般写作文喜欢什么样的词汇？

个人认为，这个意思上，用keep up with 比follow 好。或者用keep pace with the social progress.

写作用正式的词汇，生动的词汇，准确具体的词汇。

少用口语词，少用模糊词。

pengstone · 发表于 2004-8-13 18:50:00

以下是引用likui在2004-8-12 23:08:00的发言：

Perhaps because of more experience older people gain, some people hold that there is nothing that youths can teach older people. Others, including me, however, are opposed to （oppose）this perspective. The reasons are listed below.

First of all, youths have a wealth of modern knowledge. In order to qualify youths for the intense challenge in the future, institutes generally do their best to provide well-chosen knowledge to educate (多余)young people. It is important, especially according to the unparalleled explosion of knowledge（怪，it is important especially in this era of unparalleled...）. On the other hand, older people, who learned antiquated (obsolete)and limited knowledge decades of years age(before), are not able to follow (keep up with)social progress well. Of course, older people can retire and enjoy family happiness as they please. Alternatively, they can renew their knowledge with the youths’ help. (In this respect, young people can do them a favor by renewing their knowledge)For instance, in my city, when the summer vacation comes, some excellent students who specialize in computer science from major universities will go to communities to impart the knowledge of using computer and browsing the internet to older people.

Second, with respect to this argument, I think this is not dependent on age, experience and social status. Some older people view that they will be bereft of their pride if they ask youths questions. In realistic case, certain arrogant leaders are unwilling to learn from their subordinates and ignore sometimes the real wonderful ideas. Such phenomenon makes the operation inefficient. As a famous Chinese saying goes that there must a teacher in every three persons. Without doubt, every person knows something that others do not know.

感觉这段的意思和第一个理由重叠，建议换个角度，如年轻人的心态、积极的态度、不服输的精神等。

Admittedly, older people have a difficult time due to the poor ability to accept new things. But it is advantageous in （by）learning step by step,(they will reach the destination). Moreover, it is better late than never.（没看懂）

As mentioned above, I recognize that there is much that older people can learn from youths. And both learn from each other can make things better.(参照enjoy的改法)

likui · 发表于 2004-8-13 19:16:00

以下是引用zhoushao在2004-8-13 13:18:00的发言：

但我提个小小的意见,the reasons are listed below.可以不要（我在一本书中看到这样写不好）

这个我也考虑过，阅卷人一看就有模板之嫌，纯粹是充字数用的，考试时候不写就是了～

zhoushan，谢谢你的建议～

likui · 发表于 2004-8-13 19:21:00

以下是引用唐三彩在2004-8-13 16:08:00的发言：

问楼主一个低级问题，跟上时代的进步，这句话你用了follow social progress well

如果用keep up with the updated world closely. 可以吗？你一般写作文喜欢什么样的词汇？

我不会表达就硬抓头皮胡诌的，keep up with 和 keep pace with 都不错～

我写作文没有“喜欢什么样的词汇”的实力，英文写作刚入门，搜肠刮肚的想知道什么词罢了～

[原创]【逵逵写作文8.0】TWE－126

[原创]【逵逵写作文8.0】TWE－126

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