我的AI11，好像没人写过，请指教！

claudius77 · 发表于 2005-11-21 09:48:00

11. “When someone achieves greatness in any field — such as the arts, science, politics, or business — that person’s achievements are more important than any of his or her personal faults.”

Shall we pay more attention to the faults or the achievements of a person who have enormous achievements in any field – such as the arts, science, politics, business, teaching and etc? I would be mostly for the speaker’s point of view that those people’s achievements, what they contributed to our society, are of much higher significance than their personal faults, though it shall still be judged on a case by case basis. My point is based on two most fundamental but important factors used to evaluate a person comprehensively: the ratio of his contributions to his faults and the relationship between his contributions and faults.

Let’s start with the ratio problem. While it is usually impossible to give an absolutely fair ratio of one’s fault and achievements, we could usually figure out which of the side has a more significant impact on our society. Let’s take an example of Mao, former chairman of the Socialist Party and one of the greatest leaders in modern China history. Admittedly, The Great Cultural Revolution, launched under his leadership, caused a major negative effect to the economical development, his great contribution to the independence and development of China is almost unmatchable by any other one in the nation’s modern history. Therefore, we shall reach to the conclusion that his contribution is much more significant than his personal faults. In other words, his achievements are at the first place, his faults the second place.

Moreover, surprisingly as it may seem to be, there often exists an underlying connection between one’s faults and achievements. As the old saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success”. It is not hard to understand that sometimes faults are also closely connected to achievements. We consider one’s behavior as good or evil by evaluating its effect and outcome to our society. Faults are considered as faults because that behavior brings us more harms than benefits, just as achievements are considered as achievements because that It brings us more benefits than harms. Under this rule, it is obvious that a substantial or fundamental difference between faults and achievements actually does not exist. A revolutionary policy, for instance, which is once considered significant progress of some crucial issues, might be taken as a stumbling block years later. Similarly, a person might be regarded as a national hero by one country but a war fanatic by another one.

In conclusion, ignoring the contributions that a person made to our society and focusing on his faults is clearly unwise. To make a fair judgment of a great person, we shall always make clear the significance of his achievements and aftermaths of his faults, and then clearly analyze both the good and bad sides of the impact that he have brought, not only to our modern society but also to his nation or country at his own time.

claudius77 · 发表于 2005-11-21 20:32:00

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billyxiangLi · 发表于 2005-11-28 22:18:00

You favour the author's attitude ,but you said it is the two fundamental factors that determine whether great people's fault should take precedence over his accomplishement.which means it is the two factors that determine whether the author's view is justifable. So, your standpoint seems to be tentative.

This problem is more apperant when you look through your begining and ending by comparison, it turns out to be that they deviates each other.

sunshine001 · 发表于 2005-11-30 04:54:00

A few grammer mistakes, and this: "Faults are considered as faults". THis is a bit "Chinglish". Maybe you could say: There is no excuse for a faulty action.

If you finished this essay within 30 minutes, you don't need to worry about real test. You are good to go!

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springflower · 发表于 2005-12-3 12:21:00

I suggest that the Chairman Mao's case be not used in real test as it is to some extent related to ideology.

springflower · 发表于 2005-12-3 12:36:00

In conclusion, ignoring the contributions that a person made to our society and focusing on his faults is clearly unwise. To make a fair judgment of a great person, we shall always make clear the significance of his achievements and aftermaths of his faults, and then clearly analyze both the good and bad sides of the impact that he have brought, not only to our modern society but also to his nation or country at his own time.

另外，原题是说孰重孰轻，并没说要“ignoring the contributions that a person made to our society and focusing on his faults ”。你的结尾好像又没有清晰的结论了。我觉得文中可以引一些知名的大艺术家科学家的例子，并说他们对文明的贡献远超过他们个人的缺点所可能带来的负面影响。另可以再折中的说对某些人如政治领袖，个人的品格还是很重要的，因为影响到人们对他们的信任，呵呵，可以再举一下Clinton的例子

我的AI11，好像没人写过，请指教！

我的AI11，好像没人写过，请指教！

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