In this article the author concludes that supervisors should make sense to let employees to patronize the cart in ordet to continue its operation. To buttress his argument, the author reasons that increase in the number of employees leaving the company due to the loss of this service. Moreover, the author quotes the result of the staff morale questionnaire that the widespread dissatisfaction with the snack machines. In addition, the author reasons that the cart was leased for employees’ convenience. The author’s agrument seems to be solid and reasonable at the first sight, however, we can find out its illogical weaknesses if we look deeper into this argument. I will point out why the argument is problematic for several reasons.
In the first place, the author unfairly predicts that the low staff morale results from the loss of this service as an assumption. This is to say, the author cites that such two things coincide with each other. Yet we cannot readily come to the conclusion that the low staff morale and the loss of this service actually have causal relationship, as the evidence the author provides is not sufficient. It is entirely possible that more and more working pressure is an important causative factor in the low staff. Therefore, to eastablish the causal relationship between these events, it would be necessary for the author to exam and eliminate other possible factors that might accout for this phenomenon.
In the second place, the author quotes the result of the staff morale questionnaire to solidify his argument. But the methodology of this questionnaire is unstated. Furthermore, the representativeness of this questionnaire is open to doubt because the author fails to provide sufficient information to convince us. We can image that this investigation is conducted only in several special departments of this company, in which the employees are more likely to be low morale because special work circumstance and contents. For example, the more the employees receive complaints from clients, the lower their morale.
Finally, the author assumes that the operation of cart offers employees convenience. Still as far as I concerned, it is hasty to draw such a point. The majority of employees do consider a walk after several tight work hours not a hurdle but a good chance to relax.
In sum, based on two dubious assumptions and a doubtful quote, the agrument is unconvining. To strength the argument, author should to provide more detailed and sound information. Otherwise, supervisors will not accept his proposal to patronize the cart without further modified argument.
文章比较好写,就是感觉在视觉上有点虎头蛇尾了,不过好歹有400多字,enough
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