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The professor is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that people nowadays reading far less literature-books may exert negative effect on reading public, the culture in general and the literature's future. She uses three specific ideas to support her central opinion, as presented below.

First of all, she points out that besides literature books, there are a lot of other books can stimulate people's intellectual, such as science, political, and historical,（and连接的三个词词性不同呀） which are with high qualities. These kinds of books can also benefit readers a lot. What's more, a decline in literature book reading does not necessary means a decline in book reading generally.

Second, she suggests that a plenty of culture nowadays is not written. Musics（music 没有复数形式） and movies are more creative form of culture than books. What's more, he also says that culture is changed today, there are a lot of forms of expressing; and musics（music 没有复数形式）and movies are definitely not lower cultures.Therefore, the reading is wrong to argues that diverting time previously spent in reading literature to trivial forms of entertainment has lowered the level of culture in general.

Last but not least,（这里面的the可加可不加） she admits that less supporting in books is true, but she blames this phinominon（phenomenon）to those authors rather than the readers. She says that books nowadays are difficult to understand for readers. It is unfair to attributes the less supporting of books to readers only.

不好意思，没能及时给你改综合，我是北美时间，而且要带孩子，只能晚上改，昨晚12点（北京下午1点）的时候还没看到你的文章，结果就拖到现在了。我下次注意哈，改的不对的请指出。语言很流畅，听力部分也都包含了，请教一下，你觉得综合要写结尾总结么？

羊咩咩yw

没关系的呢~给我批改的时间按你的时间来就好呢，综合不着急，但是小组貌似规定是十点前改完，我也是在看分组的时候发现你还没有给我改完所以没分到组呢，所以建议你给队长说一下你的时差问题，我觉得时间够的话结尾最好写上，因为我每次写完最后一段都来不及~所以我都没有写结尾， 我加快打字的速度，力争结尾加上~~谢谢给我批改哟

羊咩咩yw

TPO12The professor is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that the girl in the professional portrait is Jane Austen. He argues that evidences link to Austen is not at all convincing. He uses three specific ideas to support his idea, as presented below.



First of all, the professor points out that even though the Austen' s family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane, it dose not necessarily mean it is a portrait of Jane' s teenager image. When the portrait authorized in an edition of Jane' s letters, Jane had been dead foe almost seventeen years, even the Austen family has never been seen her at that time.

Second, he points out that the standard Austen family is very large, Jane had a lot of nephews and neeses were teenagers during the relevant period. Therefore, there has a possibility that the girl in that portrait is one of Jane' s neeses who was resemble with her. And there are two subjects named Marry and C resembled with Jane, they were Jane' s distant neeses.

Last but not least, only the style links to Humphrey cannot prove the time of this portrait. According to the professor, there are other evidences that point out the late date of this portrait. The canvas that this portrait painted on was soled by a man named William Leg, however, he did not soled canvas in London when Jane was a teenager. The fact is that William soled canvas in London when Jane was a 27 years girl.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

TPO12The professor is not in agreement with that of the reading passage,（感觉这里就不要用逗号，非限制性定语从句我总是误以为是修饰句子）which suggests that the girl in the professional portrait is Jane Austen. He argues that evidences link to Austen is（are） not at all convincing. He uses three specific ideas to support his idea, as presented below.

First of all, the professor points out that even though the Austen' s family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane, it dose not necessarily mean it is a portrait of Jane' s teenager image. When the portrait authorized in an edition of Jane' s letters, Jane had been dead foe（for） almost seventeen years, even the Austen family has never been seen her at that time.

Second, he points out that the standard Austen family is very large, Jane had a lot of nephews and neeses were teenagers during the relevant period. Therefore, there has a possibility that the girl in that portrait is one of Jane' s neeses who was resemble with her. And there are two subjects named Marry and C resembled with Jane, they were Jane' s distant neeses.（yangyang你听力的点很好，但是不全的不要写上额，句子逻辑也处理一下）

Last but not least, only the style links to Humphrey cannot prove the time of this portrait. According to the professor, there are other evidences that point out the late date of this portrait. The canvas that this portrait painted on was soled by a man named William Leg, however, he did not soled canvas in London when Jane was a teenager. The fact is that William soled canvas in London when Jane was a 27 years girl。（这里句子逻辑处理下就很好啦）

Yangyang自己改写下吧，嘿嘿，改后我看额， yangyang，、、、、、、最近忙了么？是不是开学课很多？

羊咩咩yw

9.7 Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?


I totally agree with the statement that professor should spend more time on doing research rather than educating student. Traditionally, college students, it is thought, benefit from the professional assistance and education form professors. However, with the development of various academic files, students nowadays can benefit from practical knowledge of professors' research.

At the very beginning, students can gain research background if they are enrolled as volunteers in professors' research project. With this research background, one students can have more opportunities to find a good job. For people pursuing a college education in university, return on investment is usually a key factor in their consideration. Obviously, providing students more practical skills and knowledge form research is the best chose. According to a recent research on the internet, college student who has  research background or working experience can have more interview chances among top companies than others do.

Furthermore, by doing research, professors can help college gain a higher reputation which benefits universities, the professor himself/herself, and the students in many ways. With a higher reputation, one university can not only attract top students to study in, but also can get more investment from different companies to support more research project. Take may professor's milk packaging research as an example. This special packaging can keep milk from bacteria during a long time without using . Plenty of milk company invest this project for making more profits. In this case, spending more time on doing research is more beneficial for both university and students.

However, some people still argue that the main responsibility for a college professor is to educate students. If they spend more time on doing research, they can not have enough time to provide professional assistance and advices to students. Unfortunately, the are confused with  the problem that professor spend more time on doing research dose not necessarily means they cannot devote enough time on education. Besides, according to points in the paragraph two, students can get more practical knowledge and skills form professor's research.

To sum up, with all the aspects into consideration, I support university professors spend more time on doing research.

羊咩咩yw

我大四了呢~~没有多少课了，所以没有很忙，整天忙托福和G，额~~，我马上就要考了呢~作文还是没有谱~想办法克服30分钟300字的坏习惯中~

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

I totally agree with the statement that professor should spend more time on doing research rather than educating student. Traditionally, college students, it is thought, benefit from the professional assistance and education form(from) professors. However, with the development of various academic files, students nowadays can benefit from practical knowledge of professors' research.

At the very beginning, students can gain research background if they are enrolled as volunteers in professors' research project. With this research background, one students can have more opportunities to find a good job. For people pursuing a college education in university, return on investment is usually a key factor in their consideration. Obviously, providing students more practical skills and knowledge form research is the best chose. According to a recent research on the internet, college student who has  research background or working experience can have more interview chances among top companies than others do.

Furthermore, by doing research, professors can help college gain a higher reputation which benefits universities, the professor himself/herself, and the students in many ways. With a higher reputation, one university can not only attract top students to study in, but also can get more investment from different companies to support more research projects. Take may professor's milk packaging research as an example. This special packaging can keep milk from bacteria during a long time without using . Plenty of milk company invest this project for making more profits. In this case, spending more time on doing research is more beneficial for both university and students.(这里上面没有提到students额，嗯。)

However, some people still argue that the main responsibility for a college professor is to educate students. If they spend more time on doing research, they can not have enough time to provide professional assistance and advices to students. Unfortunately, the（they） are confused with  the problem that professor spend more time on doing research dose not necessarily means they cannot devote enough time on education. Besides, according to points in the paragraph two, students can get more practical knowledge and skills form professor's research.

To sum up, with all the aspects into consideration, I support university professors spend more time on doing research.

Yangyang的结构和内容都不错了，练打字速度就很容易了哈。只要勤动手就可以啦。另外就是不光内容要好。加入一些复杂句式来吧

羊咩咩yw

9.8 独立In an industrial day, people ask for effectiveness and efficiency from almost everything. Obviously, the most efficacious way for a company to improve its average efficiency is to improve its employees' work skill. Therefore, I strongly incline to the view that the most important investment of a company is to improve its employees' work skills.

    
One of my explanation seems to be that only the employee who has excellent work ability can bring a company a long-term benefits. For most company owners pursuing a high profits in a long run, return on investment is usually a key factor in their consideration. And it is well aware that excellent employee is the key stone to access profits. Take the most profitable technology company Apple IR as an example, according to a data from the internet,it spend 2000 million dollar a year, at least one times higher than other domestic investment, to improve employees' work ability.The leader of this company once had said that I was so glade to spend money on cultivate my employees because the future of this company was in their hands.
    
Another consideration to my judge is that employees with excellent work ability can bring consumer high -quality products which is the most popular goods the whole public want. On the other hand, high-quality products can help one company build its band and reputation. Take Lenovo as an example, it is a domestic company in our country. In the very beginning, people do not believe its products because the low quality and short using age of its products. But now it becomes the most famous computer manufacture company in this world, because 4 years before, the leader of this company decided to spend huge amount of money to cultivate his employees who can help him to created high qualified products. In this case, it is better for a company to spend more money to improve its employees' work ability.
    
However, some people still argues that the most important investment of a company is to make novel products to attract consumers and to create demanding. It is true that people tend to buy novel things that they curious about. But once they find these products are out of using, or with low quality, they will never buy it anymore;and the producers will end up with bankrupt. So, this argument is a possible way , but not a probable one. On the contrary, the high-quality product which produced by excellent employees can not only retain loyal consumers, but also can attract more potential consumers. In this sense, it is a wise move for a company leader to put the most essential investment to improve his employees' work skills.

Personally, I tend to believe that employees are the most important element of a successful company. Without of excellent employees, one company cannot find their own way to access a long run profits. So, I support the view that

羊咩咩yw

TPO13
The professor's opinion is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that selling the fossils to private ownership will exert a negative effect on scientists and the general public. She argues that the benefits of private fossils selling greatly out-weight the disadvantages. She uses three specific ideas to support her point.

First of all, she points out that the fossils can be great exposure for the public but not less exposure. Selling fossils to private owners can make a lot of fossils available. And the public schools and libraries can buy fossils in a legal way. That is to say, the public can have more chances to get access to most important fossils. It is directly opposite with the reading passage.

Second, she agues that the idea that scientists are likely to lose some of important fossils is also not realistic. Before people put value on a fossil, it needs to be identified first. And only the scientists can identified fossils. It means that all fossils sold to public owners should pass the hands of scientists. They can get more accesses to identify fossils rather than miss them out.

Last but not least, she claims that it is better for more fossils to be found rather than remain underneath. There are not many fossil collection institutions in universities or science institutions. So, even though the commercial collects may make some damages, it is better than to bury them under the earth.

ykhjy

TPO12修改
lz，抱歉来晚了 刚刚有网~ 不过我看有人给你改了  我的意见给你参考下吧
蓝色good  黄色需修改 红色我改的 绿色批注建议
The professor is not in agreement with that of the reading passage, which suggests that the girl in the professional portrait is Jane Austen. He argues that evidences link to Austen[这里觉得不大好，不如说全，evidences to prove that the subject of the portrait is Jane]is not at all convincing. He uses three specific ideas[aspects这个词好像也不大好..]to support his idea, as presented below.



First of all, the professor points out that even though the Austen' s family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane, it dose not necessarily mean it is a portrait of Jane' s teenager image. When the portrait authorized in an edition of Jane' s letters, Jane had been dead foe almost seventeen years, even the Austen family has never been seen her at that time.

Second, he points out that the standard Austen family is very large,[and] Jane had a lot of nephews and neeses were teenagers during the relevant period. Therefore, there has a possibility that the girl in that portrait is one of Jane' s neeses[我听到的好像是cousin吧]who was resembledwith her. And there are two subjects named Marry and C resembled with[这个是固定搭配？]Jane, they were Jane' s distant neeses.【最好再点明下lecture中的contradics reading passage 】

Last but not least, only the style links to Humphrey cannot prove the time of this portrait. According to the professor, there are other evidences that point out the late date of this portrait. The canvas that this portrait painted on was soled by a man named William Leg, however, he did not soled canvas in London when Jane was a teenager. The fact is that William soled canvas in London when Jane was a 27 years girl.

【lz细节很全，再修改一些结构性的句子形成自己的模板应该就很厉害了。要注意点明lecture反对reading】