蝴蝶渡海的作文贴，让砖来的更猛烈一些吧

蝴蝶渡海

综合写作是我开始写了几篇后弄的自己的模版，不知道这个自己弄得到底行不行，套了几篇发现还都差不多。但是效果还真不知道怎么样呢

婷婷connie

9.19 综合
来看看蝴蝶的自创模版~

The lecture refutes the explanations stated in the reading passage that the yellow cedar steadilydeclining(直接用decline就好，它有名词用法) is due to the insect parasites, the brown bears and the changes of climates, by claiming that those hypothesis(hypotheses) are not adequate.

First, lecturer rejects the statement in the reading passage that yellow cedar decline may be caused by insect parasites. He demonstrates a challenging idea that the healthy trees will（用can比较好，是cedar tree的一种能力） produce a chemical material to resist the insect by themselves and the insects always eat the dead leaves(这里有小出入，already damaged trees or sick ones,没说是吃leaves). Thus, the insect is not the fundamental reason why the yellow cedar trees reduce.

Second, contrary to the opinion in the passage that brown bears destroy the cedar bark (so) that the healthy tree cannot survive.（这里是逗号，前面那句只能算是状语啊） The professor asserts that the brown bears only exist in the mainland. But the yellow cedar tree also died in a large number in the island. Therefore, it is not the brown bears that cause the tree's number declining.(这强调句用的太好了)

Third, the professor said that the yellow cedar tree dead in the low elevation where the climate is warm(warmer用比较级）and this directly contradicts the points that the gradual changes of climate cause the tree dead. It is not the low temperature in the winter that cause the tree dead


conclusion: 写的很好啊，嘿嘿，就用这个模版吧，其他小错误见上

蝴蝶渡海

婷婷碉堡了。。你这太效率了吧

kiddy72

蝴蝶你的作文贴是这一个吗？

蝴蝶渡海

10.12
The most important characteristic of a politician or a leader is the good communication skill.



As we all know that, politicians or leaders’ words were not only represented themselves, they even stand for a different future. Thus, a good communication skill is a vital factor that every leader has to be trained. Nevertheless, some suggested that a good communication skill is not the most important disposition to a good leader. Other abilities such as problem dealing, composure, genial, or even valor are more important than a so-called excellent communication skill. From my own perspectives, I am fully supportive of the opinion that the good communication skill is the most crucial factors.



To demonstrate my view, I hold the main reason that leaders who own a good communication skill can develop a warm relationship with his subordinate. In today’s society, an integral group with outstanding working efficiency must be a unite team. Leaders can use their excellent communication skill to encourage the subordinate to work harder and hand with the conflict between employees in a proper way. For example, my brother works in the KPMG as an administrator, everyday they have a colossal of work to finish. To keep a upward atmosphere, My brother need to talk to each employee by consulting their feeling and mind. He also needs to pay attention to relief the conflict that people comes from different nations with different culture. He said “You need to care about each person’s opinion and ease off people unhealthy mind when it happen at the first time. If so, our group member will feel like working in the big family. Thus, I always communicate with my subordinate and the efficiency will improve in a normally way.” According to my brother’s experience, we can conclude that a good communication skill is more important than other factors.



Another reason is that high-level politician always negotiates with other country’s leader. To make sure the benefit maxim, it is undeniable that a huge difference may exist between two nations. When this happened, a good communication skill will help the leader get the upper hand in the negotiation. When the negotiation turn into a paradox, a good communication will relief the awkward situation. For instance, Premier Zhou, who works hard to make China a bright future, is impressed by each Chinese. When new china was established in 1949, China needs to establish diplomatic relations with other country. But the new international condition is rough, and Premier Zhou faces many problems. What is more, there is a lot of reporters mentioned intense topics to ask Premier Zhou. To our surprise, he can answer all of question in a magic way and relief many dangerous situation. That is to say, a good communication skill is important for a high-level leader.



Admittedly, communication skill can bring an excellent group and an efficient work atmosphere. Nevertheless, other factors we have mentioned in the first paragraph will also play a vital function during the work and diplomacy. Subordinate may be attracted and imitated by leader’s other character. But a good communication skill’s virtues overweigh other factors’ advantage. Thus, I am in favor of the opinion.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that it is the most important disposition a leader has a good communication skill. Under this instruction, leaders or politicians need to develop their communication ability to make their future brightly.

kiddy72

The most important characteristic of a politician or a leader is the good communication skill.



As we all know that, politicians or leaders’ words were not only represented themselves, they even stand for a different future. Thus, a good communication skill is a vital factor that every leader has to be trained. Nevertheless, some suggested不用过去吧 that a good communication skill is not the most important disposition to a good leader. Other abilities such as problem dealing, composure, genial, or even valor are more important than a so-called excellent communication skill. From my own perspectives不用复数吧, I am fully supportive of the opinion that the good communication skill is the most crucial factors.这个也不用吧



To demonstrate my view, I hold the main reason that leaders who own a good communication skill can develop a warm relationship with his subordinate. In today’s society, an integral group with outstanding working efficiency must be a unite team. Leaders can use their excellent communication skill to encourage the subordinate to work harder and hand with the conflict between employees in a proper way. For example, my brother works in the KPMG as an administrator, everyday they have a colossal of work to finish. To keep a upward atmosphere, My brother need to talk to each employee by consulting their feeling and mind. He also needs to pay attention to relief the conflict that people comes from different nations with different culture. He said “You need to care about each person’s opinion and ease off people unhealthy mind when it happen at the first time. If so, our group member will feel like working in the big family. Thus, I always communicate with my subordinate and the efficiency will improve in a normally way.” According to my brother’s experience, we can conclude that a good communication skill is more important than other factors.



Another reason is that high-level politician always negotiates with other country’s leader. To make sure the benefit maxim, it is undeniable that a huge difference may exist between two nations. When this happened, a good communication skill will help the leader get the upper hand in the negotiation. When the negotiation turn into a paradox, a good communication will relief the awkward situation. For instance, Premier Zhou, who works hard to make China a bright future, is impressed by each Chinese. When new china was established in 1949, China needs to establish diplomatic relations with other country. But the new international condition is rough, and Premier Zhou faces many problems. What is more, there isare a lot of reporters mentioned intense topics这个是定于后置？ to ask Premier Zhou. To our surprise, he can answer all of questions in a magic way and relief many dangerous situation. That is to say, a good communication skill is important for a high-level leader.



Admittedly, communication skill can bring an excellent group and an efficient work atmosphere. Nevertheless, other factors we have mentioned in the first paragraph will also play a vital function during the work and diplomacy. Subordinate may be attracted and imitated by leader’s other character. But a good communication skill’s virtues overweight other factors’ advantage. Thus, I am in favor of the opinion.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that it is the most important disposition that a leader has a good communication skill. Under this instruction, leaders or politicians need to develop their communication ability to make their future brightly bright就行了吧.



写的真好 词汇句式都好高级 小地方注意一下就ok啦 膜拜之～～加油！

蝴蝶渡海

10.13
Do you agree or disagree? It is better to workwith your own computer and telephone at your home than work in your company'soffice.

In modern society, due tothe rough traffic condition, there is a current that people choose their homeas their working place by using computers and telephone to communicate withtrader. At this point, some people advocate that working in one’s own home cansave a plenty of time, while others suggest that working in company’s office isbetter than stay at home. From my own perspectives, I am fully supportive ofthe opinion that working in company’s office is better than using computer andtelephone at home.

To demonstrate the view, Ihold the main reason that ones can communicate with other colleagues and getmore idea when working in company’s office. Currently, we always focus on theteamwork, and no one can get successful in business area alone. Through thediscussion or communication among the co-workers, inspiring each other,eventually, new idea always springs up at this circumstance. Take anappropriate example, my uncle works as an engineer in a wine-production factorywith flexible working time, and he needs to change the taste of the wine to enhancethe quality of the wine. Sometimes, to create a new kind of wine, he needs tostudy for a couple of weeks at home. When he faces this situation, he alwaysconsults his colleague in the office to get more advice. He said that thisbehavior usually help him get a upper hand. Thus, from my uncle’s experience,working in the office with his colleague can do him a favor.

Another reason is thatworking in the office can make people concentrated on the job itself. Have youever had this experience? When people want to focus on solving a problem, thearound environment takes an important role in the result. Just like students needto stay at classroom to study. In the same way, people need to work in thecompany’s office. When one works at home by computers and telephone, he may bedistracted by other things such as children, family member or otherentertainment activity. All of the factors probably influence you efficient.
Admittedly, there are somedrawbacks on working in the office, and other employee also can disturb one’sefficiency. What is more, due to nowadays traffic condition, people work athome can save much time. Nevertheless, the benefit of working in the officeoverweighs its drawbacks. Therefore, I am still in favor of the opinion thatworking in the office is better than working at home.

In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons,we could safely arrive at a conclusion that working at homehas many bad influences that decelerate the efficiency. Under this instruction, I firmly believe that people had better choose their workingposition in the office and brought a bright future.

AnthonySummer

Do you agree or disagree? It is better to work with your own computer and telephone at your home than work in your company's office.



In modern society, due to the rough traffic condition, there is a current that people choose their home as their working place by using computers and telephones to communicate with others. At this point, some people advocate that working in one's own home can saveplenty of time, while others suggest that working in company's office is better than stay at home. From my own perspectives, I am fully supportive of the opinion that working in company's office is better than using a computerand telephone at home.



To demonstrate the view, I hold the main reason that ones can communicate with other colleagues and get more idea when working in company's office. Currently, we always focus on the teamwork, and no one can get success in the business area alone. Through the discussion or communication among the co-workers, inspiring each other, eventually, new idea always springs up in this circumstance. Take an appropriate example, my uncle works as an engineer in a wine-production factory with（是用with吗，感觉文章结构有问题~） flexible working time, and he needs to change the taste of the wine to enhance the quality of the wine.（有些啰嗦这句，of the wine直接删掉吧） Sometimes, to create a new kind of wine, he needs to study for a couple of weeks at home. (too much simple sentence, he need study several weeks at home for creating a new taste of wine.)When he faces this situation, he always consults his colleague in the office to get more advice. He said that this behavior usually helps him get an upper hand. Thus, from my uncle's experience, working in the office with his colleague can do him a favor.



Another reason is that working in the office can make people concentrated on the job itself. Have you ever had this experience? When people want to focus on solving a problem, the around environment takes an important role in the result. Just like students need to stay at the classroom to study. In the same way, people need to work in the company's office. When one works at home with computers and telephone, he may be distracted by other things such as children, family member or other entertainment activity. All of factors probably influence you efficient.

Admittedly, there are some drawbacks on working in the office, and other employees also can disturb one’ssufficiency. What is more, due to nowadays traffic condition, people work at-home can save much time. Nevertheless, the benefit of working in the office overweighs its drawbacks. Therefore, I am still in favor of the opinion that working in the office is better than working at home.



In summary, due to the above-mentioned reasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that working at home has many bad influences that decelerate the efficiency. Under this instruction, I firmly believe that people had better choose their working position in the office and brought a bright future.

文章离子和结构不错，但是太多简单句的堆砌和拼写错误了（淡红色的），希望多多使用复杂句。

说的不对的地方多多指教啊~

蝴蝶渡海

这些淡红色的都是拼写错误？能说说一些句子的改发么？

蝴蝶渡海

10.14
The best way to improve the quality of educationis to increase teachers ‘salaries’.


There is no denying that teachers’ play an essential role toimprove the quality of the education. Recently, some criticizers emphasis that,due to the low salary, teachers do not have much motivation to keep a highquality of education. Is it a cogent statement? In my perspectives, I am fullysupportive that opinion that it is not the best method to improve quality ofeducation by increasing teachers’ salaries.

To demonstrate this statement convincingly,I hold main reason is that there is no correlation between teachers’ salariesand quality of education. As we all know that, teachers who care about thedegrees of their students will not change their mind even the salariesdecelerate. They are focusing on what the level their students have understood.For example, when I was studying in high school, the average salaries ofteachers are much lower than current teachers’ salaries. To our surprising, everyearly morning when we get into the classroom, we can notice our teacher havestand in the front of the classroom, and they work so hard without anyruthless. I think previous teachers do not have any behaviors that deceivingstudents about the learning. That is to say, salaries are not the crucialfactors which influence the quality of education most.

What is more, factors which influencethe quality of the education have huge kinds of categories. Frankly speaking, teachers’salaries may motive parts of teachers to work hard. But, as far as I amconcerned, teachers only have effect on teaching student how to learn, and thekey point that judging a student’s learning resultis that whether the students eager to learn. We need to concentrate on thestudents’ learning mind, how to keep them in highly interest towards knowledge,and how to make their first right step independently. Thus, there is nothing todo with the teachers’salaries.

Admittedly, with the salaries improving,some benefit could spring up. Teachers may offer some of salaries as a gift tomotive their students more diligent. However, this circumstance may not happenin every class. The benefit from increasing salaries will not behave obviously.

In summary, due to the above-mentionedreasons, we could safely arrive at a conclusion that increasing teachers’ salaries is not thebest way to improve quality of education. Under this instruction, I firmly believethat the quality of education is not only the teachers’ duty, but also our students’hard working tomake our bright future.