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N只梨花压海棠

8月18独立，The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries

Educational improvement as the heatedly discussed issue has been controversial since it was raised up. Because of its crucial position in the modern social development, the public and authorities are concerned with the educational quality and system under scrutiny. Caught by such attention, some educators propose the simple and available plan that the teachers’ salary be higher to motivate the teachers, propelling the process of quality improvement. Rational seems the plan from economic perspective, but obviously better alternatives could reach the final goal. Several points in different dimensions will be demonstrated and explained to testify my hypothesis.

Generally, three elements decide the quality of the education, teacher, students and facilities. Decided by multiple factors, “best” way should exploit these factors comprehensively instead of narrowing to one. Not only the teachers’ morale but also the students’ should be motivated to avoid the negative response from students. Assuming that a group of students taught by a high salary teacher who is highly energetic and dynamic but lack of teaching experience, the students would not feel involved but feel bored to some extent. The effects would be fatal to educational process and learning attitudes of students, high salary teacher doesn’t equal to qualified teacher is the fundamental drawback of the proposal.

Learning is such an intricate “project” that utilizes both the teaching and the learning tools. Facilities such as libraries and study rooms benefit the students in another way which reinforce what they were taught during the class time and provide a place to explore the uncovered. Pitching investment in the fundamental facilities could diversify the learning pattern and enhance the quality of education after class. Indispensible are the feedback and review for students, therefore, constructing the new learning facilities stimulate the motivation and efficiency of learning, on the other hand, the need of people who are willing to study could also be satisfied.

In addition, most teachers who devote themselves to the career worship that teaching is a noble thing. Raising salary to spur them might result in the chaos of the industry, causing people to chase after money instead of job satisfaction. Demerits will overweigh the merits if the plan executed. Budget should be assigned to training fees of teachers to guarantee that they are competent and capable of their duties. Educational improvement could be realized only if the resources were allocated appropriately.

Finally, I would like to emphasize that increasing the salary is a good way to improve the quality of education but not the best way, as I mentioned, considering the whole influencing factors to come up with a well-rounded plan is the primary direction to the educators and authorities.

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-- by 会员 N只梨花压海棠 (2012/8/18 4:40:26)

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我觉得签名改成做饭比较押韵

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8月18独立，The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries

红色错误 蓝色建议 高亮精彩

Educational improvement as the heatedly discussed issue has been controversial since it was raised up. Because of its crucial position in the modern social development, the public and authorities are concerned with the educational quality（吹毛求疵地说：the quality of education 和educational quanlity感觉有细微的不同，前者更好） and systemunder scrutiny. Caught by such attention（这个分词的逻辑主语应该是the quality of education,但是这句话的主语是educator，不符）, some educators propose the simple and available plan thatthe teachers’ salary be higher（raise 会更好，但是要改的话整句话都要变了）to motivate the teachers, propelling the process of quality improvement. （As the issue is caught by such attention, some educators propose to raise teacher's salary, a simple and direct way to propell the process of the quality improvement.粗改，供参考）Rational seems（adj.+v.???倒装么？？） the plan from economic perspective, but obviously better alternatives could reach the final goal. Several points in different dimensions will be demonstrated and explained to testify my hypothesis.

Generally, three elements decide the quality of the education, teacher, students and facilities. Decided by multiple factors,(还是逻辑主语的问题)“best” way should exploit these factors comprehensively instead of narrowing to one.（这句话好得我快热泪盈眶了） Not only the teachers’ morale but also the students’ should be motivated to avoid the negative response from students. Assuming that a group of students taught by a high salary teacher who is highly energetic and dynamic but lack of teaching experience, the students would not feel involved but feel bored to some extent. The effects would be fatal to educational process and learning attitudes of students, high salary teacher doesn’t equal to qualified teacher is the fundamental drawback of the proposal.

Learning is such an intricate “project” that utilizes both the teaching and the learning tools. Facilities such as libraries and study rooms benefit the students in another way which reinforce what they were taught during the class time and provide a place to explore the uncovered. Pitching investment in the fundamental facilities could diversify the learning pattern and enhance the quality of education after class. Indispensible are the feedback and review for students, therefore, constructing the new learning facilities stimulate the motivation and efficiency of learning, on the other hand, the need of people who are willing to study could also be satisfied.

In addition, most teachers who devote themselves to the career worship that teaching is a noble thing. Raising salary to spur them might result in the chaos of the industry, causing people to chase after money instead of job satisfaction. Demerits will overweigh the merits if the plan executed. Budget should be assigned to training fees of teachers to guarantee that they are competent and capable of their duties. Educational improvement could be realized only if the resources were allocated appropriately.

Finally, I would like to emphasize that increasing the salary is a good way to improve the quality of education but not the best way, as I mentioned, considering the whole influencing factors to come up with a well-rounded plan is the primary direction to the educators and authorities.

总评： 写的太好了 很少看到逻辑这么好的文章，没有用具体白痴的例子，但是又充满了字数！！！
           不是我不认真，是真心改不出错误，我摔！
           总之，再接再厉！

N只梨花压海棠

8,19 独立---Do youagree or disagree; the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/herpersonality or character?

An oldsaying “you are what you wear” has been recognized as the undeniable truth bymost people during a long period. However, judged by the appearance andclothing in others’ eyes, people are inclined to hide themselves behind theiroutfits, confusing other people the impact especially the first impression.Therefore, the opponents firmly support the undermining effectiveness thatdress brings. The point of view seems superficially indisputable but totallyincomplete to construct the logical chain. The discrepancies would becritically considered and corrected in the following parts of the article.

Frankly,most people love themselves in the mirror than in the reality where their eyescould not contact. Self-image strongly connects the inner mind with clothes.Every time when people dressed up and staring at them in the mirror, they willappraise and score their image, whether it was outstanding or ordinary wasdecided and determined by their own minds, others have little influence on thescoring system. Various perspectives construct different dimensional worlds,correlating with the personality, education and status. A fashionable manwouldn’t wear out-dated clothes when he goes out, a leisure wouldn’t wear suitwhen he was on vacation. Time will change, but the traditional and naturalattribute belongs to the whole humane no matter in what generation.

Furthermore,in modern society, individualism has been raised to a incomparable positionthat even could represent a culture’s value. Generally, clothes people chooseto wear could offset the imperfections of people to draw other’s attention ontheir merits. Individualized patterns depict the different lives of differenthuman being, To distinguish themselves from other, modern people are in fond ofthe peculiar accessories and outfits to be labeled as their own “brand”.Honorable and favorable in contempory development, outfit selection already hasbeen a valuable art and booming industry.

On theother hand, indication of one’s personality could be exposed to multiplefactors besides the way the people dressed, but the statement doesn’t revealthat the way people dressed is not associated with one’s character at all.There is a deficient loop to be convincing. In addition, the style ofconversation and action dominates first impression in a unacquited relationship.People are less likely to hide their character behind their clothes because ofthis reason.

Atlast, sounds overstated as it is, I am definitely proponent of the previousevidences, and the outfit people choose could be crucial and determining tosome extent. Given the description of one’s dressing style, People could tellthe internal value and attitudes towards life. But in order to be objective, otherindicators should also be thought over to be unbiased.

婷婷connie

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8,19 独立---Do youagree or disagree; the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/herpersonality or character?

An oldsaying“you are what you wear”has been recognized as the undeniable truth bymost people during a long period. However, judged by the appearance andclothing in others’ eyes, people are inclined to hide themselves behind theiroutfits(这个词也可以表示衣服，婷婷木有想到诶), confusing other people the impact especially the firstimpression.Therefore, the opponents firmly support the undermining effectiveness（直接用effect行吗?） thatdress brings. The point of view seems superficially indisputable but totallyincomplete to construct the logical chain. The discrepancies would becritically considered and corrected in the following parts of the article.这句话太强了，是模板吗？

Frankly,most people love themselves（better跟后面的than对应） in the mirror than in the reality where their eyescould not contact. Self-image strongly connects the inner mind with clothes.Every time when peopledressed up and staring at them in the mirror, they willappraise and score their image, whether it was outstanding or ordinary wasdecided and determined（这两个是不是重复了？） by their own minds, others have little influence on thescoring system. Various perspectives construct different dimensional worlds,correlating with the personality, education and status. A fashionable manwouldn’t（would not） wear out-dated clothes when he goes out, a leisure wouldn’t wear suit when he was on vacation. Time will change, but the traditional and naturalattribute belongs to the whole humane no matter in what generation.

Furthermore,in modern society, individualism has been raised to a incomparable positionthat even could represent a culture’s value. Generally, clothes people chooseto wear could offset the imperfections of people to draw other’s attention ontheir merits. Individualized patterns depict the different lives of differenthuman being, To distinguish themselves from other(用others比较好), modern people are in fond ofthe peculiar accessories and outfits to be labeled as their own “brand”.Honorable and favorable in contempory（contemporary） development, outfit selection already hasbeen a valuable art and booming industry.

On theother hand, indication of one’s personality could be exposed to multiplefactors besides the way the people dressed, but the statement doesn’t revealthat the way people dressed is not associated with one’s character at all.（这句话好绕口啊，不过总算读明白了，双重否定）There is a deficient loop to be convincing. In addition, the style ofconversation and action dominates first impression in a unacquited（unacquainted） relationship.People are less likely to hide their charactersbehind their clothes because ofthis reason.

Atlast, sounds overstated as it is, I am definitely proponent of the previous evidences, and the outfit people choose could be crucial and determining(one's characters感觉少了个谓语) tosome extent. Given the description of one’s dressing style, People could tell the internal value and attitudes towards life. But in order to be objective, otherindicators should also be thought over to be unbiased.



Conclusion：

果真奇作，膜拜一下~~

1.处处彰显逻辑的光彩，三个sub-point结合在一起了

2.only一些拼写错误了

3.真的很好~~

N只梨花压海棠

8,20 独立 --- your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does


Happiness index as an eye-catching measurement has ranked all the nations to score the countries' happiness factors. Judging from the cultural value and traits, we can obtain the coincidence that what we consider the country where civilians have more pressure from their jobs has lower happiness index in the investigating from statistics. Biased and Superficial seems the judgment made, but the trend could still be speculated through the numbers. I, as a social person, comprehensively combine different "rational" factors with "irrational" own feelings, concluding that job apparently has more effect on happiness than social life, reasons and examinations will be explored to break down the controversial issue.

The first question hanging over my brain is that what takes you more? The job, or your social life? Most people would offer the undeniable answer: yes. Of course, the job has occupied more than half of our day time, roughly what we experienced during the working time has twice effects than the rest of our time, not even the social life time. When on duty, people easily are in touch with the satisfaction and responsibilities, the two basic needs leading us to be enjoyable. On the other hand, social life in the modern society has crucial position and incomparable effects on leisure time, it still couldn't decide our related feelings that brought by job.

Networking as a heatedly discussed issue in the career area is a important social pattern in during the working time. From the ever-increasing stock price of Linkedin, we can reach the previous point of view."We love networking" , this will definitely gain various agreements in all industries,. Providing new opportunities and visions in their careers, networking has been one of the new social lives based on the jobs. In addition, the increasing rate of employment, such as in the Europe, would distract the unemployed from their normal social life to the job related social activities.

Assuming such a situation, you prefer to enjoy social life rather your job, what will the your life be? Desperate in your professional area, you are easily indulged in the social "intimacy" , luring around and feeling worthless except on the party and on date. What a miserable it will be. Social life to some extent release people from the pressured work but value nothing to make people choke. The main value of a human exists in the achievements especially the working achievements, giving up the main value, people will be hysterical and lost.

Finally, basing on the evidences supporting the arguments I make, we could inspect that job is more essential in satisfying your own life and creating the successful personal values. The effects it causes are lasting and extremely ditrimental to one's fulfillment.

婷婷connie

刚刚看多啦a梦，正在改文，别着急哈~