一战Fair. 每日作文贴，求拍。

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0809独立   实在是写的没感觉

All of us involve in social life every day. We have to manage the relationship with new people come into our lives, such as new colleague, classmate, roommate and so on. Then how can we know his/her characteristics? Someone suggests that you can know a person though the types of friends this person has. As far as I am concerned, I would stand for the   claim and my reasons are as following.

People tend to make friends with someone who has a same interest, common belief or similar education background.  For instance, if you have a chance to meet my friends, you will find they are equipped with cameras, camping tools, talking the different cultures and nature views all over the world. Then herewith the question, what kind of person do you think I am? Bingo! A person who loves travelling around the world and may also be an amateur of photographer.  When people hang out with their friends, there are so many common topics for them to chat: the movie starts, society news, tasty foods, interesting TV shows. Thus, in this aspect, you can know a person from the common characters with his/her friends.

Some people may argue that, friends do not necessarily have common characteristics. A person’s friend can be quite different from, even opposite to, this person.   It is indeed true.  An indoor person probably will have a very good friendship with outdoor person; someone who is easy-going may have a group of difficult friends. However, it does not mean the types of friends cannot reflect the character of this person.  In contract, the differences between someone and his/her friends can even reveal something more deeply about this person, because we also make friends with people who have complementary advantages when we lack such characters.  

In conclusion, common characteristics between someone and his/her friends can tell this person’s interests, belief or other background.  Even the differences can reveal the eagerness in one’s intimate thoughts. That’s why I agree that we can know a person well through his/her friends.

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TOP 7 综合（不好意思交的太晚了，辛苦改作文的同学了）
The reading passage claims that it is unlikely that woodcompanies in the United States will obtain ecocertification. The speaker in thelecture holds an opposite view with the passage and lists several reasons asfollows.

First, the passage concludes that American consumers wouldnot pay attention to the ecocertification label because they have no trust inadvertisements.  However, the speakerclaims consumers do not treat advertising claims in the same way.  Consumers can distinguish the advertisementfrom an independent organization. They actually have a favourable trust in advertisementsoffered by independent ecologically companies.

Second, the speaker disagree with that consumers are totallyprice driven. People indeed care price, but only when the price is much higher.The difference among prices would not affect consuming activities when it isless than 5%, which, in this case, is the cost to obtain the ecocertification.  In contrast, such certification even convincesconsumers to add environment value on the wood products.

Third, the speaker points out that American companies shouldworry more about the competitions from foreign companies, rather than foreignmarkets referred in the passage. If American companies act slowly on gettingecocertification, international competitors who have already had suchcertificates will crowd into American market.

linwa小默

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

All of us involve(改成被动) in social life every day. We have to manage the relationship with new people come into our lives, such as new colleague, classmate, roommate and so on. Then how can we know his/her characteristics? Someone suggests that you can know a person though(through) the types of friends this person has. As far as I am concerned, I would stand for the claim and my reasons are as following.

People tend to make friends with someone who has a same interest, common belief or similar education background. For instance, if you have a chance to meet my friends, you will find they are equipped with cameras, camping tools, talking the different cultures and nature views all over the world. Then herewith the question, what kind of person do you think I am? Bingo! A person who loves travelling around the world and may also be(是不是直接用maybe读起来好像顺点) an amateur of(删) photographer. When people hang out with their friends, there are so many common topics for them to chat: the movie starts, society news, tasty foods, interesting TV shows. Thus, in this aspect, you can know a person from the common characters with his/her friends.果然如大家所说例子很好啊~而且行为很流畅，自愧不如啊。

Some people may argue that, friends do not necessarily have common characteristics. A person’s friend can be quite different from, (or) even opposite to, this person. It is indeed true. An indoor person probably will have a very good friendship with (an) outdoor person; someone who is easy-going may have a group of difficult(different) friends. However, it does not mean the types of friends cannot reflect the character of this person. In contract(contrast), the differences between someone and his/her friends can even reveal something more deeply about this person, because we also make friends with people who have complementary advantages when we lack such characters(traits可以换一个用用哈).  

In conclusion, common characteristics between someone and his/her friends can tell this person’s interests, belief or other background. Even the differences can reveal the eagerness in one’s intimate thoughts(这个有点读不懂). That’s why I agree that we can know a person well through his/her friends.

个人意见哦，理由其实两段都是在说可以从朋友身上看出一个人的characteristics, 所以要是能再加一点其他的理由就更好了~
不过楼主的行文真的很棒，读下来很流畅, 让人感觉很舒服。例子也很好！值得学习！

lemonyhu

The reading passage claims that it is unlikely that woodcompanies in the United States will obtain ecocertification. The speaker in thelecture holds an opposite view with the passage and lists several reasons asfollows.

First, the passage concludes that American consumers wouldnot pay attention to the ecocertification label because they have no trust inadvertisements. However, the speakerclaims（+that，另外这句话里两个claim看着有点重复，能换一个更好） consumers do not treat advertising claims in the same way. Consumers can distinguish the advertisementfrom an independent organization. （比如这句话就可以说出来他们可以区分出来independent organization和一般的advertisement的区别，这样句子就能更复杂些，也更清楚）They actually have a favorable trust in（have trust in..不太常用呢） advertisementsoffered by independent ecologically companies.

Second, the speaker disagrees with that consumers are totallyprice driven. People indeed care price, but only when the price is much higher.The difference among prices would not affect consuming activities when it isless than 5%, which, in this case, is the cost to obtain the ecocertification. In contrast, such certification even convincesconsumers to add environmental value on the wood products.

Third, the speaker points out that American companies shouldworry more about the competitions from foreign companies, rather than foreignmarkets referred in the passage. If American companies act slowly on gettingecocertification, international competitors who have already had suchcertificates will crowd into American market.



     1、文中很多空格没打，平时也要注意哦~~~或者是LZ的软件的问题？一些语态上的小错误要仔细~

       2、整体看来字数有些不足啊，记得要求是220字的~~~~怎么也要写到200+才行吧~

       3、另外句首的过渡词不用一定要first second这种，当然用也可以~我觉得只用这些显得很单调~比如In the first place啊这类的可能更好些，还能凑凑次数

       4、总体来说文章很流畅，就是句式什么的稍微多样一点，再稍微润饰润饰就没问题了，听力听的也比较全了~

lemonyhu

麻烦楼主帮我改一下作文啊==~~

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0813 综合

The reading passage states that today’s reading of literature declined, and thus it caused unfortunate effects for the reading public. However, the speaker in the lecture refutes what the passage claims.

First, the passage draws the conclusion that the reading public is missing out on important benefits by reading less literature. It is not true. Despite of literature, people can spend their time on reading science essays, historic stories, political analysis and so on. Such books are quite creative and can also provide high quality benefit. They can also stimulate readers' intelligence.

Second, even reading public fails to spend their time on general reading, the speaker disagrees what inferred in the passage that trivial forms lowered the level of culture. If the public is enjoying a brilliant song or movie, does it lower the culture standards? The answer is no. Today's culture has changed. Music and movies can show culture more directly to people.

Third, the passage claims that it is the poor standards of today's readers that fail to support talented writers. The speaker contradicts to the conclusion of the passage either. The speaker points out that we should not blame the reader but the author instead. Today's author always writes something that is difficult to understand. They write something that even writers in the old days would not write.

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0813 独立

know about the events happening around the world that do not affect our life.

There is a debate on whether or not our life will be affected by knowing about the events happening around the world.  Some people argue that the events happening around the world has nothing to do with our daily life, thus there is no need for us to know what is happening around the world. As far as I am concerned, I would strongly disagree and my reasons are as follows.

To begin with, knowing events can bring common topics to friends, family and workmates and thus reinforce the relationship. What were your friends/family/colleagues talking about mostly during the past few days? I believe the answer is the Olympic Games held in London. Imagine when you hang out with your friends in those days but one of your friends knew nothing about the Olympic Games, what do you think he/she is? A nerd lives in his/her own world! News of movies stars, political leaders and sports stars are the main source of office gossips. If we do not know what is happening around the world, we lose the common topics with our friend and the link of friendship is weakened. In this aspect, we see how our daily relationships are affected by knowing world events.

In addition, catching up with the most up-to-dated information in world can help us keep competitive.  High school students choose their major by obtaining the latest news on what kind of career is the most popular;  technology information company can set up development strategy by finding out what is the leading company doing; Scientists can decide their studying directions by learning the latest findings or researches around the world.  Therefore, the world enlightens our future development.

Finally, knowing what is happening around the world is so important that it can even bring fortune to us.  eople can make their investment decision by obtaining the latest economic news. If you read the news of Lehman Brothers’s bankrupt in 2008, you would know that a financial crisis was coming and sold all your stock if you had any.  A friend of mine learned from a public speech that urbanization process of China is fast and thus made the decision to purchase a house. His fortune at least tripped during the past 5 years! How can anyone argue that events happening around the world have no impact on our life!

As discussed above, knowing what is happening around the world can bring common topics among our friends, make us to be competitive in social life and even bring fortune to us. Therefore, the world events are involved in our life heavily.

margrate

高亮黄色不错高亮绿色有点问题蓝色字体建议



know about the events happening around the world that do not affect our life.

There is a debate on whether or not our life will be affected by knowing about the events happening around the world.  Some people argue that the events happening around the world has nothing to do with our daily life, thus there is no need for us to know what is happening around the world. As far as I am concerned, I would strongly disagree and my reasons are as follows.


thus 是一个副词，而不是连词，不能当作连词使用在两个句子之间；

e.g

Agriculture has developedrapidly, thusprovidinglight industrywithampleraw materials


To begin with, knowing events can bring common topics to friends, family and workmates and thus reinforce the relationship. What were your friends/family/colleagues talking about mostly during the past few days? I believe the answer is the Olympic Games held in London. Imagine when you hang out with your friends in those days but one of your friends knew nothing about the Olympic Games, what do you think he/she is? A nerd lives in his/her own world! News of movies stars, political leaders and sports stars are the main source of office gossips. If we do not know what is happening around the world, we lose the common topics with our friend and the link of friendship is weakened. In this aspect, we see how our daily relationships are affected by knowing world events.


thusàthen (adv/conj)，这样也可以和前面的and分割开来
貌似不太怎么用定语从句/从句


In addition, catching up with the most up-to-dated information in world can help us keep competitive.  High school students choose their major by obtaining the latest news on what kind of career is the most popular;  technology information company can set up development strategy by finding out what is the leading company doing; Scientists can decide their studying directions by learning the latest findings or researches around the world.  Therefore, the world enlightens our future development.


help sb. To do

whatàwhich

这里的分号是表示列举么？如果是列举，在最后一项之前要加and；按照我的理解，应该是在列举吧，建议第一句也加上助动词can，尽量让三个结构平行；



Finally, knowing what is happening around the world is so important that it can even bring fortune to us.  eople can make their investment decision by obtaining the latest economic news. If you read the news of Lehman Brothers’s bankrupt in 2008, you would know that a financial crisis was coming and sold all your stock if you had any.  A friend of mine learned from a public speech that urbanization process of China is fast and thus made the decision to purchase a house. His fortune at least tripped during the past 5 years! How can anyone argue that events happening around the world have no impact on our life!



As discussed above, knowing what is happening around the world can bring common topics among our friends, make us to be competitive in social life and even bring fortune to us. Therefore, the world events are involved in our life heavily.

观点罗列很清晰，也很充分，向SS学习。
唯一的感觉是SS不太怎么用定语从句之类的复杂句式。初次改作文，只能从语法的角度看出一些，见谅！

浅吟天

黄色模版加好的，绿色批注红色我改的



0813 综合

The reading passage states that today’s reading （一般没有所有格在加of的用法,有点奇怪，可改成reading of literature has declined nowadays）of literature declined, and thus it caused unfortunate effects for the reading public. However, the speaker in the lecture refutes what the passage claims.(开头好！)

First, the passage draws the conclusion that the reading public is missing out on important benefits by reading less literature. It is not true. Despite of literature, people can spend their time on reading science essays, historic stories, political analysis and so on.（抓得很细啊） Such books are quite creative and can also provide high quality benefit. They can also stimulate readers' intelligence.

Second, even reading public fails to spend their time on general reading, the speaker disagrees what inferred in the passage that trivial forms lowered the level of culture（这句话有点绕，还有disagree 后面一般on sth/with sb/ that,后面那个从句能简练点吗）. If the public is enjoying a brilliant song or （少了个定冠词把？）movie, does it lower the culture standards? The answer is no. Today's culture has changed. Music and movies can show culture more directly to people.

Third, the passage claims that it is the poor standards of today's readers that fail to support talented writers. The speaker contradicts to the conclusion of the passage either. The speaker points out that we should not blame （for）the reader but the author instead. Today's author always writes something that is difficult to understand. They write something that even writers(readers) in the old days would not write（read,就这一个句子，不然就完美了。。）.

综上，lz听的很细很好，点都抓到了
有些句子还可再精炼一点。真的挑不出没什么问题