yangyangyu练作文,求拍,求踢,求猛击

kchszy061ban

In（yangyang你介词加不？）Modern society, full of fierce competition is influenced by a great amount of uncertain factors. As a result, it's hard for people to indentify the would-be secure or successful job in the future. Considering about this, some may estimate that in the past, with less technology and fewer work forces, the situation could be better. However, in fact, they have（had） no big difference. It's no easier for our ancestors to identify what kind of job or career would have a stable or promising future.

First of all, future always keeps a veil on the face to be away from us, and we will never know what may happen in the next minute to us建议去掉）, let alone to（同去） our career life. Before the world financial crisis in 2008, bankers and brokers took a high proportion among those millionaires or even billionaires, and to be a banker or broker is lots of youngsters' dreams. However, the crisis pulled them down overnight, which was out of many people's surprise. Sometimes, career life is like taking a roller coaster with eyes closed, and it's difficult to tell when we will meet our ups and downs in this drastically changing world.（这句好）

Even though someone may argue that we can make assumptions about the future trend based on the past records and recent materials at hand, they just overestimate the stability of the working market. No work or career can be promised to be the everlasting reputed or successful one（去掉+without any changes）. In the 1980s, the newly setted reform and opening-up policy in China nurtured a new popular business- speculation, and those who caught up with this trend made great fortune. However, this blossom soon vanished when some new regulations were raised up.(yangyang 你再来个小总结这段就完美了额。额，还有下段的小总结句)

Therefore, the changeable society makes it's impossible for any business leads the top forever（私下觉得lead the top用法不对，然后貌似也和主题关系不是很大额，secure，successfu 一定是要在前沿么）; the limitation of our knowledge circumscribes us from an insightful prediction. Last but not the least, in different times, the definition of a secure and successful job can be different.

All in all, to predict the future successful or secure job is a hard task for both modern people and those in the past.

1yang yang 的例子多了，不过只是一笔带过，没有深入展开，例子展开后既可以表达自己观点，又可以增加字数哈，yangyang可以看下范文中例子展开的方法；

2 例子之后呢，来个总结，或者进一步的解释例子起作用的原因，这样可以保持好的逻辑结构额。

3 yangyang习惯怎样写作文？是边想边写还是先都想好再写，都想好再写可以保持logic，tpo听力里面well-made play就有说这个，然后还有一个文学听力将怎么写文章中的角色，听下就用，还是不错的额。

kchszy061ban

yangyang 你要偷懒了，，，，，，还有，看到有人背作文200 句子和35 好句，我就开始也背了。 你要不要背。想着不写下来怎么练习呢，yangyang，既然要考试toefl 就不要放松自己额。

yangyangyu

yangyang 你要偷懒了，，，，，，还有，看到有人背作文200 句子和35 好句，我就开始也背了。 你要不要背。想着不写下来怎么练习呢，yangyang，既然要考试toefl 就不要放松自己额。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/17 22:12:22)

谢谢ban ban! 恩, 我会努力跟上大家的进度的~ 对，其实我觉得写好作文多背一点东西是很重要的啊~我就是看得挺多，但是背少了~~我们都加油吧~~相互监督，每天都要都去学点好句子，好词哈！！！之前有个认识的美国朋友推荐我看: 除了NY times, 还有New York Review of Books ,London Review of Books都不错. 你有时间也多看一点吧~老外写得，遣词造句什么的都可以学学!

yangyangyu

6月18日101017 大陆 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.

After the whole exhausting day exposing to a computer screen at office, immersing in the book sea at library, “what to do for some rest?” arises in modern people’s mind. For some, a wonderful movie or a fantastic book helps our brain to take a breath. I do agree that books and movies are beneficial for relaxation at a certain degree, like comedies and funny books can bring us a lot of amusement. However, the assertion that watching movies or reading books is more effective than doing physical exercise needs a second thought. And personally speaking, I think doing sports works better to relax, by clearing our head away from the daily work or study, by providing us a outlet to let go of our pressure and anxiety in a healthy way, and also doing exercise is not merely a way of relaxation, more importantly it is a positive and lively attitude towards life.

Working out in the gyms or doing sports in an open playground, our head can totally free from the daily data, documentations or other kinds of desk jobs. Instead, we can focus on our own thoughts, the self. The concentration of the self, the listening to our heart, and the understanding of our true wants, will calm us down, and keep us away from the outside tensions and pressure. Yoga, for example, is one of the exercises favored by many people. In its soft and quiet music, our thoughts flow, our body stretches and then we can get a rest both mentally and physically.

Unlike reading or watching movies, sports always entail a participation of our whole body. The office or library life strains our eyes and drains our mind. To read or watch movies, we also need to use our eyes and mind, which may do no good for a rest. By doing sports, we can have a real outlet to explicit our tension and meanwhile keep fit.

What’s more, doing exercise is not merely a way of relaxation, but a positive life attitude. Life lies in movement. Every time, when I feel depressed, I’d like to go out jogging a bit. It encourages me to keep moving on, to never give up on the way to a final line. Sometimes we feel hard for life and easily get disheartened that’s because we lack the ambition and a belief for a better future. Physical exercises offer us that positive attitude.

All in all, as these reasons shown above, I think it’s better to relax by doing physical exercise than reading a book or watching a movie.

DanielleZ

After the whole exhaustingday exposing to a computer screen at office, immersing in the book sea atlibrary, “what to do for some rest?” arises in modern people’s mind. （写的非常精彩呢~）For some, a wonderful movie or a fantasticbook helps our brain to take a breath. I do agree that books and moviesare beneficial for relaxation at a certain degree, like comedies and funnybooks can bring us a lot of amusement. However, the assertion that watchingmovies or reading books is more effective than doing physical exercise needs asecond thought. And personally speaking, I think doing sports works better torelax, by clearing our head away from the daily work or study, by providing usa outlet to let go of our pressure and anxiety in a healthy way, and also doingexercise is not merely a way of relaxation, more importantly it is a positiveand lively attitude towards life.（第一段写的非常好，用了排比，以及形容词修饰，etc，学习了）

Working out in the gyms or doing sports in an openplayground, our head can totally free from the daily data, documentations orother kinds of desk jobs. Instead, we can focus on our own thoughts, the self. Theconcentration of the self, the listening to our heart, and the understanding ofour true wants, will calm us down, and keep us away from the outside tensionsand pressure. （好句子）Yoga, for example, is one of the exercisesfavored by many people. In its soft and quiet music, our thoughts flow, ourbody stretches and then we can get a rest both mentally and physically.

Unlike reading or watching movies, sports alwaysentail a participation of our whole body. The office or library life strainsour eyes and drains our mind. To read or watch movies, we also need to use oureyes and mind, which may do no good for a rest. By doing sports, we can have areal outlet to explicit our tension and meanwhile keep fit.（举个小例子会好一些）

What’s more, doing exercise is not merely a wayof relaxation, but a positive life attitude.（好句子~） Life lies inmovement. Every time, when I feel depressed, I’d like to go out jogging a bit. Itencourages me to keep moving on, to never give up on the way to（建议till） a final line. Sometimeswe feel hard for life and easily get disheartened that’s because we lack theambition and a belief for a better future which physical exercise could bring to us（建议加上）.Physical exercises offer us that positive attitude.

All in all, as these reasons shown above, I thinkit’s better to relax by doing physical exercise than reading a book or watchinga movie.

DanielleZ

Dear Yangyang，
1.第一段，写的非常不错。各种华丽的排比以及形容词，一下就把我震撼啦。哈哈~
2.后面三段，我看到banban同学给你分析的时候，也说过。例子说明的不时特别充分（像第三段的jogging，那个例子，我觉得可以再多说几句）。
3. 学到了好多词啊，好多词~灰常谢谢啦~

加油~

kchszy061ban

yangyang你这篇写的太好了，

DanielleZ

yangyang 你要偷懒了，，，，，，还有，看到有人背作文200 句子和35 好句，我就开始也背了。 你要不要背。想着不写下来怎么练习呢，yangyang，既然要考试toefl 就不要放松自己额。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/17 22:12:22)

Banban，
之前你给我修改文章的时候，说过要背诵~我也决定试试看啊~嘿嘿~

yangyangyu

6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to the problems, yet puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change.

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, only until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored, and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power that can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better future is always ahead. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gave up in the midway. From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong will to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true, patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

kchszy061ban

yangyang给我改作文额，嗯嗯，我的目前还没人改啊