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发表于 2012-2-18 09:40:35 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
119 When old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position







Should modern development be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings when it comes to old buildings could not be suitable for modern purposes? In my view, the speaker makes the statement unfairly with some omission. In some cases, some old buildings which ought to be preserved considering their special meaningfulness and values.



Admittedly, with the boosting development of economy and society, a city should adjust to modernization of demand no matter how long its history is. After all, we can not deny the fact that a lot of cities are becoming more and more crowded with influx of scads of people. Considering this situation, modern buildings may be much more suitable and comfortable than old ones for people to live and use. Take Beijing for example, once it had a multitude of Si He Yuan, which were classical architecture styles of residential housing of Beijing

citizens dated from the Ming Dynasty. However, with a history of more than 700 years now they suffer from the urban renovation and economic development of China, most of them can not provide more spaces for more people to live compared to the modern tall buildings so that they slowly disappear from Beijing, at the same time, are replaced by tall buildings which can hold many people living in. From this point, some old buildings should give a way to the modern development.


However, the essence of preservation of a historic buildings actually equate with the meaningfulness of development of modernization. In fact, the historic building is just like a book, written the history and past of a city, the people and a nation. It can be regarded as fortune for the contemporaries as well as descendants. The historic building is the symbol of the past, without which, people will lose the sense of belonging. Besides that, some old buildings are not simply the representation of the past and history, virtually; they have turned to be signs of cities. Just as London with Big Ben, Beijing with Forbidden City, New York with the State of Liberty and Egypt with Pyramid, which are not only the hallmark of a time, but also can go impetus on the development of tourism as well as economy. In this light, these old buildings are valuable and the legacy of culture of a city, if they were demolished or damaged by people for the sake of modern development, the characteristics of their cities would vanish and perish.





In addition to, compared to pictures and documents, the old buildings are real , which could provide vivid education to people, help to reconstruct the memories of the past and appeal to the young generation for paying attention to lessons and experiences from the history. Consider, for example, the Old Summer palace, or called Yuan Ming Yuan, in Beijing, China

, its debris is still standing, which is an epitome of a historical event about being invaded by foreign countries due to the decadence and corruption of Qing Government. This old building calls on the young generation in China to build their country strong for protecting their motherland from being invaded.


To sum up, the speaker does not sufficiently take the advantages and disadvantages of old buildings in the modern development into consideration. As far as I am concerned, people can rationally and scientifically be on balance the collision between modern development and the preservation of historic buildings. For some old buildings, which are less value and suitable can be removed by contemporary needs. However, for some old buildings which are value and meaningful for people and the whole society, which are deserved to be preserved, not only for contemporaries but also for descendants.
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沙发
发表于 2012-2-18 20:57:01 | 只看该作者
不错,结构和内容都很好,语言表达也比较灵活多变,继续努力,加油!
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-2-19 19:57:00 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
地板
发表于 2012-2-19 20:16:56 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 19:57:00)

速度你写多了就好了,前期训练还是侧重于把文章写好吧,你多看些A的范文应该可以看出写A的一般套路,熟悉了就好了,找不不合理的可以质疑的地方然后指出原因并给出自己觉得也可能合理的解释等等
5#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-2-19 20:40:12 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 19:57:00)


速度你写多了就好了,前期训练还是侧重于把文章写好吧,你多看些A的范文应该可以看出写A的一般套路,熟悉了就好了,找不不合理的可以质疑的地方然后指出原因并给出自己觉得也可能合理的解释等等
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 20:16:56)

谢谢。我还想问:我的作文如果有摘抄网上的好issue里的句子(比如过渡句),会被判为雷同吗?如果我在考试中照搬我在论坛里贴的自己的作文,会不会被判抄袭?
6#
发表于 2012-2-19 22:15:31 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 19:57:00)



速度你写多了就好了,前期训练还是侧重于把文章写好吧,你多看些A的范文应该可以看出写A的一般套路,熟悉了就好了,找不不合理的可以质疑的地方然后指出原因并给出自己觉得也可能合理的解释等等
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 20:16:56)


谢谢。我还想问:我的作文如果有摘抄网上的好issue里的句子(比如过渡句),会被判为雷同吗?如果我在考试中照搬我在论坛里贴的自己的作文,会不会被判抄袭?
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 20:40:12)

句子里面用到的好的表单方式或者短语当然是可以化为己用的,但最好不要完全照抄,你现在写的作文到考场上当然可以直接写上去,但你最好保证时间问题
7#
 楼主| 发表于 2012-2-19 23:02:50 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 19:57:00)




速度你写多了就好了,前期训练还是侧重于把文章写好吧,你多看些A的范文应该可以看出写A的一般套路,熟悉了就好了,找不不合理的可以质疑的地方然后指出原因并给出自己觉得也可能合理的解释等等
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 20:16:56)



谢谢。我还想问:我的作文如果有摘抄网上的好issue里的句子(比如过渡句),会被判为雷同吗?如果我在考试中照搬我在论坛里贴的自己的作文,会不会被判抄袭?
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 20:40:12)


句子里面用到的好的表单方式或者短语当然是可以化为己用的,但最好不要完全照抄,你现在写的作文到考场上当然可以直接写上去,但你最好保证时间问题
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 22:15:31)

谢谢。我曾在网上看到一个帖子:发帖者说作文评审官判定他的作文是抄袭,因为他的作文跟出现在太傻、寄托上的某篇作文一样。但是其实是发帖者本人将自己的作文发到上述论坛里请大家批改,考试时照搬了而已。PS:我的担心可能是多余的。
8#
发表于 2012-2-20 00:01:06 | 只看该作者
最好把提纲列出来 这样别人看得直观一点
9#
发表于 2012-2-20 11:50:43 | 只看该作者
这篇写的很不错,我读下来,思路框架很顺。用的几个例子是亮点,和自己的论点结合的很好。GOOD JOB!
10#
发表于 2012-2-20 12:48:37 | 只看该作者
谢谢。我想问:怎样提高写作速度?我现在写一篇ISSUE花两个小时。还有argument看了范文不知如何准备。是现准备模版还是先开始写argument。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 19:57:00)





速度你写多了就好了,前期训练还是侧重于把文章写好吧,你多看些A的范文应该可以看出写A的一般套路,熟悉了就好了,找不不合理的可以质疑的地方然后指出原因并给出自己觉得也可能合理的解释等等
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 20:16:56)




谢谢。我还想问:我的作文如果有摘抄网上的好issue里的句子(比如过渡句),会被判为雷同吗?如果我在考试中照搬我在论坛里贴的自己的作文,会不会被判抄袭?
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 20:40:12)



句子里面用到的好的表单方式或者短语当然是可以化为己用的,但最好不要完全照抄,你现在写的作文到考场上当然可以直接写上去,但你最好保证时间问题
-- by 会员 竹林中人 (2012/2/19 22:15:31)


谢谢。我曾在网上看到一个帖子:发帖者说作文评审官判定他的作文是抄袭,因为他的作文跟出现在太傻、寄托上的某篇作文一样。但是其实是发帖者本人将自己的作文发到上述论坛里请大家批改,考试时照搬了而已。PS:我的担心可能是多余的。
-- by 会员 雨不下 (2012/2/19 23:02:50)

我觉得这个担心是多余的吧,人家阅卷人还不至于说也在论坛上花那么多时间看我们平时训练的作文,人家判雷同也不是很随便的
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